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As I flashed back on that cold Harlem Night
Streets filled with gangbangers trying to bring new fright
New corners means new enemies to bring eternal flame Bruises n scars dissapear yet theres still mental pain
Walking frightened hoping you're not the Next One
Praying to a superficial God just to see the Next Sun
Pleading for a way out so you can Escape the Danger
Working 9-5 just to get Raped by Strangers
I still remember exactly what he Said
I asked if he wanted just cash or Bread?
But his actions spoke to me as he moved Closer
Took off everything except for the Toaster
He too wished for a way out of these cold Halrem Streets
What he did next I will not Repeat
I have tried to move on from that treacherous Sin
Ever since that lonely night my life has been Grimm

I was 10 years old playing at park..
Mom said,"Son , make it by dark."
I was with friends so she thought I was safe..
Thought it was O.K. cause it's a well lit place.
We were on the jungle gym when a familiar face...
Appeared from the shadows with out a trace..
He came to say hi and gave me candy..
Then I walked with him and his puppy Brandy.
We came to a path that entered the woods..
We talked about God and how he was good..
We came to a place and sat to rest
He pulled out a magazine called raunchy sex
He promised me candy and salvation from sins.
And that's the point where my terror begins
He did things to me I said really hurt
And to this day I'm afraid of the Catholic Church.

-- Sun Mar 27, 2011 2:29 am --

please vote on imagery,topic execution,flow...ect.

grimm only u can make a rape story end in laughter, props

i think Flowetry had this one
imagery Grimm
Topic execution Flowetry
Flow Flowetry
Grimm Had a good start But lost It At the end
So My Vote=Flowetry

I could picture both images in my mind, but overall I could really imagine grimms, so imagery goes to Grimm.
Topic execution, both were tight, but flowetry really set the scene, so topic execution goes to flow.
Flow, this goes to Grimm, good flow, flowetry mentioned grimms name at the end which I thought was really genius, but I'm all for the jokes and grimms ending really swung it for me, had me really laughing, so that goes to Grimm.

+1grimm
good job guys

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-Storytelling-Flowetry came nicer with the story to be honest. Both presented rape at the end, but Grimms final is what took from his story giving the edge to Flow.
-Flow- Grimm gots this, Flowetry, what is up with your THIRD line kid? Other than that it was pretty even.
-Creativity- Both of you did the exact same thing, pretty weird if you ask me. I guess the Church took it by a hair. Grimm.
-Multies- Grimm by peach fuzz.
-Wordplay- Flowetry gets it simply by using Grimm. lol.

MVGT- Grimm

Imagery-flow
Flow-grimm
Topic execution-grimm
Wordplay-flow

Close battle but grimm had me with that last part.
My votes on grimm.

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3-1 me so far...illadelphiakid didn't vote cause he's in my crew

aight good battle bruh

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