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We both have punches..my come in larger proportions.
The second your parents had you they were all for abortion.
punch/.5, flow/1, 1.5/4. ok, it flowed, but its not personal nor very fresh, which takes away from a punch.
Neilz's an awful contortion of what a man's supposed to be.
I'll use a tube of frozen meat and smash both rows of teeth...
Flow/1, punch=.5, 1.5/4. Again, set up had really nothing to do with the punch. Hes "awfully" flexible in comparison to what a man should be? So ima hit him with a bar of meat
That "32" possesses and leave'em laying with two broken cheeks.
You think you're ill I must be toxic..you don't want a dose of me.
punch/.5, wordplay/.5, 1/4. The first line reads un natural. Nice to see evidence of word play, but again, its extremely played. I also don't make sense of what 32 has to do with being possessed.
Priests couldn't excercise this demon with holy water and rosaries.
I ain't talking confrontation when I say Neilz wants loads of beef.
flow/1. 1/4. who are you battling? again the set up had nothing to do with the punch, no personals, im not even counting that as wordplay.
He's in to animalistic sex with toads and sheep.
And won't except money from fag mags...he'll pose for free.
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He's got a hoe's perception and's like two phones with "no reception"...
When he raps for the masses cause there's "no connection".
Punch/1. 1/4. If wording was better, it'd be a very nice line, prolly your best. But your entire battle is too open. Remove the times you said his name, and fill in the blank with some one elses name type of verse. NO name flips, weak wordplay, no personals, set ups lacked for the punch. All in all you score 6/24. Not very good.

The shit 32neilz spits is combined with chemical FUSION, beat me?, Grimm, ur livin an ILLUSION/

Sneak up behind, stab and SLASH YA, grab the bronze knuckles, CRASH and SMASH YA/

This guys a fuckin LAUGHING STOCK, probably loves to BATH IN juice from COCK, neilz'll never STOP/

I'll REARRANGE YA, with a shot from the CHAMBER, drown ya in ur own GORE, this is WAR/

This is a battle u wish u never STARTED, u get guided by ur namesake(grimm reaper) to the land of the DEPARTED/

I spit fire, that statement can be TRUSTED, weild a mic that's jewel ENCRUSTED, Grimm gets DUSTED/
Youre bars are set up differently than im accustomed. I seen a trace of name play, rhyme scheme was ok, but learn to understand the rules i guess. You guys should battle again and this time battle each other... with the same bar length. lol