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im so happy when im with u
when im not shit i miss u/
holding back just what ill do
i dont wana feel any remiss from u/
so for now ill just blow a kiss to u
my heat u stole and this love is true/
will u be my boo so beautiful like the sky is blue
dont worry baby u r too/
oh man u had me at hello
so i can let this verse flow/
sit back relax and enjoy the show
forget all the foolish acts u exp wit joe/
ill have u like woe
im so glade were taken it this slow/
may i might add to u id never say no
so let the wind blow ya hair
your true colors r starting to show everywhere/
ill never let u fall
but most of all ill stick tho it all/
no matter now big or tall
come on baby now its safe to fall/
how can i take the time
to descride the the feeling inside/
girl u blew my mind dont b shy u dont haveta hide/
i know i cant stop staren
but u go out lookin so sexy in what ya wearing/
sexy body has me hyp
ima rip and spit these rhmyes/
i want u and im not lieing
hold u tight girl im flyin/

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Eh... Ok. I read it a couple times over and i imagine its meant for audio, not an actual written piece. That being said, it'd be ok, audio, if delivered correctly. To be honest its rather simple, and a couple parts dont really make sence (out of place). ie. "ima rip and spit these rhmyes/". Just keep at it man.