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ok 8-16 bars

house rules

due whenever.

-- Tue Mar 01, 2011 9:37 pm --

So fatal x about to get his head wrecked/
all with the rhymes i used on the text he read/
destroy this shit from london to nervada/
eat ya like a banana blow you mind like nervana/
cos you know no one can spit the same shit that jam does/
so ya better run cos im comin for you like uncle sam cuz/
Im gonna fuck shit up worse than uncle sam does/
and do all this shit while im sittin wearing pyjamas/
cos im insane and you cant match the pictures that i paint/
enter your brain ull be more fucked up than lil wayne/
this is like rikers island cos i got this shit on lock down/
and ull get raped by some fat guy with his cock out/
im a junkie for this shit u say that x is fatal/
tell me that while im drinking your blood from a ladel/
try to step to me what the fuck are u messin for/
i wont stop till youve dissapeared from this whole fucking message board/

I'll post when I get a chance to devise a verse

-- Wed Mar 02, 2011 2:11 am --

Try to help me understand,Why?When you RAP your the CRITIC
Jimmy Jam you ain't "THE STREETS",so keep that wack shit in BRITAIN//
NOBODY asked your OPINION,let alone for a VERSE//
are you trying to be BOLD and did you call that your WORST//
Cause I.........GOTTA SAY,you GOT ALOT you GOTTA PAY//
.......16 bars,thats like WAR SHIT in MODERN DAYS//
........WANT WAR,well...check the ASSAULT//
I drop FLAMES like NAPALM even off of the COAST//
I CUT you OFF at the THROAT,before you EVER get a WORD IN//
and even though you POSTED FIRST,that SHIT wasn't WORTH IT//
a HYMEN to a VIRGIN,and CHERRIES never COUNT//
but I COUNT CHERRIES,now do you KNOW what I'm ABOUT//
go ahead and SOUND IT OUT,SCREAM like a RAPE VICTIM//
take your INNOCENCE in a sense with a HATE SYSTEM//
....MAKE A GREAT DIFFERENCE, NAH you NEVER WILL//
Thats WHY DOGS GO BELLY UP,and the REASON you've just been KILLED//

vote: fatalx overall more raw then jimmy's
fatal did good in most category's so ill give him the vote

Jimmy was basic...nothing spectacular...flow was okay, needs work though, not much to say on his verse...

FatalX had an overall better verse. Better wordplay but still pretty basic...fav line "
I CUT you OFF at the THROAT,before you EVER get a WORD IN//"...and so...

MVGT: FatalX

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-- Wed Mar 09, 2011 6:10 am --

Close this ish...