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GIVE ME FEEDBACK

Posted: Sun Feb 27, 2011 11:18 pm
by supersonic killa
ill reck your dome and scatter the remaining pieces on the floorboard
precise pieces get torn
rugged teeth compare me too the megaldon, because i be the mega-don
ill make you swallow sediment, my posin pen came equiped with the h1n1 sickness
my precession will slice your bone marrow quick
toxic fumes consume from the toxic wasteland
you can bare the righteous tyrant

feedback please

Re: GIVE ME FEEDBACK

Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 5:29 am
by JiMMyJaM080691991
hmm orite i cant tell what the flow would be like if u actually spit it. soubnd little clunky and how many words actually rhyme here.. tell me how to get rank up and shit.

Re: GIVE ME FEEDBACK

Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 5:43 am
by supersonic killa
you just hating cause i beat you man. and i rhymed every word so stop hatin

Re: GIVE ME FEEDBACK

Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 10:12 pm
by Duke
Sounds like a verse that one of the dudes who sells weed to the Wu might be allowed to spit when the crew was too high to take it away from him.