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Now before you can FEEL my WORDS,you have to be able to FEEL my PRESENCE.....
　
I pour my heart and soul into this thing they call the "RAP GAME"//
sitting at this desk.....,having what you would call a BAD DAY//
MY HEART HURTS---------->Do I have to be CREATIVE?//
for you mutha fuckas to FEEL,UNDERSTAND and RELATE with//
the SHIT that I've BEEN THROUGH,FEELING like IM NOT GONNA MAKE IT//
STARING at this BOTTLE of PILLS,like WHY the FUCK do I have to TAKEM//
I HATE THIS..........FUCK YALL--->this MATRIX is FUCKED OFF//
and if you want me to REINTERATE,you can TAKE IT and FUCK OFF//
I'M DONE.....I CUT LOSS,I'm tired of all the PERFECTION//
and if my verse has to be PERFECT,for my words to be EFFECTIVE//
then screw it....I don't need it,I GUESS I LEARNED MY LESSON//
This game is for the BIRDS....my FINGER FLIES 2 thier SUGGESTIONS//
while my PRIOR-EXPRESSIONS,that seem SENSELESS in DIRECTION//
only give me new MOMENTUM,as I retire past IMPRESSIONS//
EVERLASTING-i am RESTLESS,Ruthless......with CONFESSIONS//
and IF I CANT BE MYSELF,yall wont ever get the MESSAGE//
Capitalizatoin=emphasis
.....=pause in breath
---->=on to the point
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5/5 with the vocabulary
sends a message sounds like immortal technique or better

i swear yhu be goin ham yhu like my new role model err sumthin lol like yhu could be the nex new eminem lol

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This was cool, had a nice little vibe to it
the whole idea of the piece was brought nicely
the emotion stuck out more then anything
only thing I didn't like was your explanation at the end
usually it would help if it's in the beginning
I don't really feel like going back and reading it again
as you would put it...but this would be a dope track
nice lil vibe though man...keep writing