2 new ish's

[Alvin]

Killa Who?
http://snd.sc/hU7Rnd

La Da DA Da
http://snd.sc/fLcM3R

Community Service:
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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/topic-vt20737.html
If you have a piece I haven't fed yet, link me and ill do it up.

[FatalX]

La Da Da DA
well the first thing I am going to say is that the topic wasn't really clear....this is either about suicide or a love that never got a chance,describing all the emotions
verse:
your opening line was strong almost poetic,actually your whole track was almost poetic.overall flow was thorough,you did a great job making sure that none of your words repetitive.punches and metaphores where delivered on par.
structure and scheme held together strongly.the only problem I see was that it wasnt really clear what you where rapping about unless you wanted it to be open to interpitation.vocab was strong,and you had some good multis in there.

beat/instramental:
good choice,solid sounds very smooth,sounds very profesional

recording:
no static,no backfeed,no hidden ambient noise,I can tell your using a decent microphone,overall good quality

mastering:
the only thing I would say that really needs to be mastered a little better would be your vocal recording....I can personally tell you havent found your precise settings for your voice...it doesnt mean that it sounds bad it just means that once you get a top of the line mic and someone to master your vocals you will be ready to go mainstream

overall quality:
on a scale of 1-10 for artist from your basic closet studio set up to a multimillion dollar studio and your basic garbage emcee to hip hop prodigies I would say you sit at at 6-6.5/10 which is actually really good....to give you an idea of what I mean like Jedi Mind Tricks for e is a 7.5/10
Zro from houston is maybe 4/10,3 6 mafia 4.5/10

-- Sat Feb 26, 2011 1:15 am --

killa who
I like the feel and agression of this one here
verse:
overall it was on point not many personals tho,breath control on point,
"hogging up the mic I'm hog tieing killa e
clogging up his arteries smoking up his killa free"
this is the part I thought you sounded the best as far as tone,the second half of your verse was the strongest,
you opened kinda weak and finished strong thats always good.

beat:
yet another great choice,I like your taste in instramentals

recording:
I am going to have to say that this is the best recording I have heard from you,your voice just sounds better to me when your aggressive with the mic.once again very clear sound

mastering:
after listening to both tracks this one had a lil better volume control

overall quality:
scale of 1-10 6.5/10.....def worth taking the time to listen to it...

I would like to see this beef evolve into an out n out war piece....your voice was meant for aggression....you do need work like we all do but your about to reach a point where all emcees want to be and thats the ability to completely transform a beat....you know where your persona in hip hop begins to take on its own life in hip hop....good job keep up the work

[blokB]

you know the only reason i come check my illest is to see what punk dropped? i bet you didnt. but its true. onthe other hand.... both these tracks are raw... but la da da da da wATEVER the fuck! is super ill! production value to the max bro! lyrical value, and touching. im puting this on my ipod punk. good work homie. real talk. i love this song. skate session worthy for sure and i will dj this at my bros house party on st pattys.... (if you dont mind of course)... good work sir. keeeeep it up!

[Alvin]

@ FatalX - The song is meant to be vague, its actually really dumb if i were literal about it. So i weaved it into something that came off serious. Its about a dude trying to loose his virginity lol. About the battle i agree. I enjoyed it more than i thought i would. Ill shoot for gutters next time.

@ BlokB - I appreciate it man. Means a lot, and of coarse you can play it where ever you want. lol

@ Yezzir - Ill focus more on punches and creativity, the dude backed out so it went no where, but thanks for the tips.


Thanks for the feed Yall.

[MonuMental]

Your vocal style and delivery is there and your breathing is good. You delivered well on your content in both pices and demonstrated good breathing techniques that were conducive to maintaning a good flow. I can't really give you any advice on these pieces, you set your sights took aim and hit your mark. Well played.

[Slicka]

man punch jus when i start "feelin myself" you put some shit like this out.....raw fam on both the quality is their and that da la la la shit went hard lol......bt props fam........