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I will return the favor...

Here's a battle verse I recently posted up against a guy named HEFF DOLLA$. All feed is appreciated.


You getting trashed like a fiend, Dolla abnout to get cashed in for free
I'll murk this fag quick, 'put H.D. in a box', and I'm not selling plasma t.v.'s!!!

Ask and receive, put this fuck in a headlock and collar this dude
C'mon man, everyone knows it doesn't take shit to TEAR A DOLLA IN TWO!!!

Everyone on site will holla It's True!!, fade you then bump ya barber
This bar is only halftime, I didn't need four quarters to fuck up a dolla

I need a dump truck for slaughters, like this... Can't believe this clown pushed me
Tryin to be something you're not, the fact remains fag, "HEFF ne're BEEN AROUND PUSSY!!"***

Look, see... Punches so nice and hit precise, they even cause cell division, dawg
While the only time we ever see 'H.D. in full effect', is when we turn the television on!!!

You smell me shittin', god? YOu got no game, I bet you never call a whore
If a bitch wants change in her life, she's not going to visit Dolla's Store

Broke muthafucka, pay attenion, put your lil .22 down, you'd be insane for firing
The last time I checked my bank account, Dolla wasn't worth a shit in today's society!!!!

HEFF ne're - To sound like Heffner if spoken (Heff 'never')

NASTY ASS PUNCHES!! WAY TO GET CREATIVE ON FLIPPIN HIS NAME AND USIN IT IN THEM PUNCHES. IT BE TOUGH TO COME BACK FROM THAT SHIT FOR DOLLA.

You getting trashed like a fiend, Dolla abnout to get cashed in for free
I'll murk this fag quick, 'put H.D. in a box', and I'm not selling plasma t.v.'s!!!
^^^ flow is ok, nameflip and punch are dope...

Ask and receive, put this fuck in a headlock and collar this dude
C'mon man, everyone knows it doesn't take shit to TEAR A DOLLA IN TWO!!!
^^^ flow is ok again, punch is good but seems basic. I'd keep "TEAR A DOLLARS IN TWO", but re-word the beginning of the line to make it more creative(don't know if that's the exact word I'm looking for, but continuing)...like, "at my WEAKEST, I'd still..."

Everyone on site will holla It's True!!, fade you then bump ya barber
This bar is only halftime, I didn't need four quarters to fuck up a dolla
^^^ now that's what I'm talkin' about...

I need a dump truck for slaughters, like this... Can't believe this clown pushed me
Tryin to be something you're not, the fact remains fag, "HEFF ne're BEEN AROUND PUSSY!!"***
^^^ creative, best punch so far...

Look, see... Punches so nice and hit precise, they even cause cell division, dawg
While the only time we ever see 'H.D. in full effect', is when we turn the television on!!!
^^^ first line went with the punch, I like that...creative and flowed nicely...

You smell me shittin', god? YOu got no game, I bet you never call a whore
If a bitch wants change in her life, she's not going to visit Dolla's Store
^^^ nice...

Broke muthafucka, pay attenion, put your lil .22 down, you'd be insane for firing
The last time I checked my bank account, Dolla wasn't worth a shit in today's society!!!!
^^^ flow's good, punch just didn't do it for me...

Overall: you got a nice verse here Murk. Can't see your opponent taking this battle unless he comes hard with the personals...

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