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That was definitely something more upbeat than I've heard from you lately. Seemed like you were getting winded in some parts, but I really dug the lyrics and the hook. Good mic presence as well, I could see you performing something like this. Nice drop.

Nice beat.

First verse:
I like how you switched the flow up here and there but still kept with the beat nicely.

Hook is pretty good. Not great but good. I think that autotune could've been used for the hook the whole way through. It's a nice subtle effect.

Second verse:
Flow was a little choppy.

I could see you spitting some Busdriver kind of shit after listening to this. The story you told here is pretty good. Nothing groundbreaking but you told it well. Overall, a good piece. Nice production values.

Murk - haha, i dont like locking myself into one style. I definitely think an artist should be able to spit to anything. I prefer piano and spoke, but ill roll with anything. I sound winded cuz i was trying to record all in one bang. If i have to take a breath and stop in midst recording, what am i supposed to do on stage or better said in some ones basement lol. Thanks though man.

Kau - What you mean bus driver shit? and thanks man, the second verse was a weird one for me, still trying to polish a flow i guess. Thanks though man. As for the auto tune shit, i hate it. But i ran an experiment a while back, one song, with, same song without, and everyone was a dumb ass and loved the one with autotune. So ill slip it in songs that have a not so attractive topic.

i got into this punk. your style on this one reminds me of alot of my favorite artists. Sage Francis popped up in my head after listening to this. i can tell its older because your recording quality is way better now but the lyrical content got me man. and you rode the beat well. thats key as we all know. real nice punk. bravo.

I appreciate that Blob B. Thanks for the comparison and taking the time to listen

Flow was on point you switched it up............your new quality better then this but still you had a different style was more up to tempo nice drop punchd............

Appreciate the feed slicka, when you dropping new ish? It is older, but im getting the message im liked more faster than spoke. Werd

breath control man, could hear you breath with every first word. but shit thats the same feed you give me... so stepping out of that

-like the switch up
dont like the chorus
-like the intensity
dont like the raspy breath noises
-liked the style and vocals
production was good

(i fucking hate autotune)

but overall this track is good a lil short, only 2 verses.
but if your looking for a 3rd hit me up i'll drop something and send you vocals to wrap the song up. if not thats cool

good shit man and thanks for feed my shits

im dropping new stuff tonight....trying to work the flaws out in the flow so it stays on topic fam...but yeah i like more of ya uptempo then spoken....ya spoken would be sick if it was uptempo lol combined i think you would lyrically kill it ya pressence would be off the scale imo

Defiance - Yo, thanks for the fered man, this is some older stuff i found. Im still working on the breath control.About the collab, lets do it up man, a fresh new one. I cant open that song cuz i had already deleted the program i did it with. Cant cross platform, but im more than willing to do somin new. We can get a beat, record, and ill send mine or you send yours, whatevers clever. Let me know.


Slicka - Ill keep an eye open for it then. Ill try a more up tempo spoke, see how it sounds, thanks for the advice.

Ok, So I'm Liking How This Starts With That Sample. . .I Think It Faded Earlier. Quality Is Crisp. Kinda Like The Chorus, Good Emotion. You Bring A Good Delivery To This Track, Breath Control Seems A Little Rough, BUT, The Vocals Are Smooth. Dubs Are A Little Off On The 2nd Chorus, And When It Repeats, It's Louder. I Know You Were Aiming For That Hard Emotional Delivery, But You Should Turn It Down A Bit. 2nd Verse. . .Good Rhymes In This One, Stretched Lines Here And There IMO, But You Did It Good Either Way. I Enjoyed Tha Track For Tha Most Part. Good Drop Famz