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A verse I couldnt think of to name anything cool or creative

Posted: Mon Feb 14, 2011 3:43 pm
by Audible Thought
this is the, school of thought honorary graduate
a master at his craft, the subjects and the predicates
embellished with no awards no rewards needed
vision clear like water, reviving the creed hence(creedence)
the genius rebelling, against the felons
a fella with a hell of a nack for sportin the raps
i bring it back like a snapback, to the boom bap days
creating pathways a track , for this freight train
attack the dazed confused individuals
and paint the whole damn city with my visuals
its the principle, that i carry out thru the word of mouth
gettin hotter like im travelling south this is the end of doubts
me and beats is like your ass and a couch
definitive and fitted to fiddle with capital cows
im snatchin the crown, attached to the mound
i just cant help but pitch this masterful sound

Re: A verse I couldnt think of to name anything cool or crea

Posted: Tue Feb 15, 2011 12:20 pm
by FatalX
Audible.....hmm...well the way you structure your rhymes to me seem a lil' difficult to get the flow of in its entirety...although that is not to say it doesnt rhyme its just your style is peculiar to me....I def like the depth of thought that you soaked right into this...there where key points throughout your verse that when it seemed you where losing me brought my attention right back....good job keep posting

Re: A verse I couldnt think of to name anything cool or crea

Posted: Wed Feb 16, 2011 1:07 am
by Defiance
i liked this shit, i thought it flowed great just had to say it the right way
i liked about the firs 3 barres the best the rest were allright but the opener really stuck out

shit was short tho, not even a full verse

i'd like to see more in a drop but good shit none the less