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Leeroi jumped on for verse 2. we still need a hook. any ideas?
p.s. sorry it took so long to post this leeroi i been hella busy pimp.

verse 1 begins at :36
verse 2 begins at 1:59

verse 1- blokB

take a look at me tell me what do you see
a bag of mixed nuts seekin therapy
a stack of pin-ups stickin terribly
or a mac that cant define the word merrily
aparrently, im scared to be
anything accept my transparency
so when a blind man tought me that my stares are free
i started storin em behind my thought of heresy
yo bare with me, i guarentee
if you can get passed me dancin all wearily
youll find that blok b is just a fuckin parody
of your favorite emcees hip hop revelry
and no ill never be what you want from me
still i climb to these heights to bring you every beat
with a verse full of who my dirty mirror sees
before a streak free shine leaves me vision free
shit tends happen that dont mean i play with it
wits end with rap still its to the grave with it
known around my blok as the childhood cynic
cause i used to toss rocks at over faulty genetics
my aesthetics seem rare today its fair to say
prosthectis on my tounge force a rarer praise
cosmetics overdone endorse reverse delays
try to hide it under sheets cheap logic portrays
wander the maze of my own insecurities
when lost google world can lead to maturity
i wana break free of transparent obscurity
swim through the grey of sentimental impurities
today im sure to be what you thought me to be
a trainee to reign with burns third degree
with sights set high lost in turn yearn eternity
question still stands have the worms even heard of me

Verse 2- Leeroi Green

my world mirrors yours and thats a fact of life/
My hand to Christ I am more than just refracted light/
half the time I walk around with slanted eyes mad that I/
can't break through this glass and feel like somehow I've been pacified/
this dirty mirror I call home d'you think I'd let you pass it by/
like that homeless guy you know is dying without a glancing eye/
I've long quit trying to be heard 'cus trying only implies defeat/
au contraire to quietly somebody queue the choir please/
I'm inclined to beast entire beats or preach in times of need/
like this is my diocese and rules do not apply to me/
a giant leap of faith is what it take to see the other side of me/
decidedly I side with peace but we will never be compliant heaps/
the mood has changed, through the looking glass I bruise the page/
what can you do or say to someone whose views sustained by abuse and rage/
and you can save your accolades and claims or say that I aint rap this perfect/
but if you would only clean this mirror you would see that you have scratched the surface/

Fucking nice. It took me a minute to match the flow to the beat but once it clicked it was perfect. The flow was killer in both verses. Multies, too. really feeling the content too. There's too much to quote really. I guess these were my favorite lines:

so when a blind man tought me that my stares are free
i started storin em behind my thought of heresy
yo bare with me, i guarentee
if you can get passed me dancin all wearily
youll find that blok b is just a fuckin parody

shit tends happen that dont mean i play with it
wits end with rap still its to the grave with it
known around my blok as the childhood cynic
cause i used to toss rocks at over faulty genetics

today im sure to be what you thought me to be
a trainee to reign with burns third degree
with sights set high lost in turn yearn eternity
question still stands have the worms even heard of me

my world mirrors yours and thats a fact of life/
My hand to Christ I am more than just refracted light/
half the time I walk around with slanted eyes mad that I/
can't break through this glass and feel like somehow I've been pacified/

I've long quit trying to be heard 'cus trying only implies defeat/
au contraire to quietly somebody queue the choir please/

the mood has changed, through the looking glass I bruise the page/
what can you do or say to someone whose views sustained by abuse and rage/
and you can save your accolades and claims or say that I aint rap this perfect/
but if you would only clean this mirror you would see that you have scratched the surface/

This really speaks to me as being a piece about self reflection, setting goals, aspirations and living up to expectations. Also, how we hide things from the outside world or even from ourselves, sometimes.

Really nice stuff here. I would love to see if you guys come up with some type of hook for this.