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a ReViseD DevaStatioN

Posted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 2:49 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
Jus be patient I blaze wit amazement,
its sacrid when i leave yuh mind leakin like a basement,
Erase yuh face kid to faceless im tasteless the way i brake yuh face on the pavement,
Send a plague in phases aimin to spray pain in brains playin it aint fabricated,
I demonstrate penetration, i stay forever faded for those who never made it,
forced to be medicated, wit seditives i sedate and set a date to seperate it,
Our generation is feather weighted ive waited for the rate to be heavy weighted,
the stakes and changes could save the nation but we feel like were obligated,
to fuck each other like we masterbated,
you'd prolly hate it, what i jus stated, so don't make it complicated
my statements straight hit like bricks ima mason, my hearts racin, im paced -n-,
to blaze scripts thru my chest plate wit plain whits you couldnt of "busted" wit 8 tits,
Im steel so stainless, still so shameless,
im plain bliss your rhymes are musty like stained pits,
I slay wit my tape mixed, dodgin yuh shots like the matrix,
you couldnt contemplate it to say it, to make hits to make sence wit 8 flips, your flameless,
ima pilot i stay lit, you couldnt blaze shit, even if you put fire to your basement and inflamed it,
a revelation of devastation creatin havok wit out any hesitation,
I meditate when I elevate in education never fakin im waitin for levitation,
I proclaim to fame wit, the same spit I paint the game wit,
Its basic I got you faintin and hatin my flames when theyre blazin like satans,
Ima patron, aimin gernades on parades of nations, fuck government relations,
Im reigning, you couldn't put my flame out when its rainin,
Im gainin, speed and stayin on my knees and prayin for a better day when,
Im saved and gaven the opportunity by my savoir to be one of his favorites,
Cant wait to say I made it, not to be famous cuz fame can shove the game up his anus,
Its dangerous when im angered and usin lamens terms and tazin the lames wit,
Make em nameless in their lameness, im sick and contagious, outrageous,
The way I blaze thru pages, im ragin Im tameless I'll rip thru cages,
Im out, number one the best as I stated!!!!

Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 3:44 am
by B-Bear
that shit's dope homez!! ya lines are a bit too long though, would have got a better flow if you'd just kinda cut ya lines in two and rather posted it likt that.

but overall i liked it a lot, good use of multies. liked how u put two or three rhymes in one line, dope shit!

Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 1:56 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx man

Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 2:00 pm
by complexity
Nice man. multis made the flow go real good. I liked it.

Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 2:34 pm
by oval office
big ups on this one

Posted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 2:52 pm
by ~Symbolikull~
the feed back is much appreciated yall, thanx

Posted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 12:05 am
by ky-ill
pretty decent drop good luck in the battle

Posted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 1:28 am
by Invincible
Yeah nice work.

Posted: Fri Nov 24, 2006 8:39 am
by Mac
Good Shit Ghost, I See You Been Workin On Ya Multies Since We Quit Talkin On MSN..lol..Adressin That Guy That Said The Bars Are A Bit To Long, There's Really No Certain Length If You Got Multies Inside of Multies An Ever Syllable Is Matched..Goooooooooood Shitt!

Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 4:07 pm
by MesaR
VeRy Nice..Liked tHe Concept of ya multies in one line......big raps

Posted: Mon Nov 27, 2006 7:39 pm
by Viral
i like it...reminds me of myself wen i still did text..keep it up...7.8/10

Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 2:37 am
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx yall its appreciated

Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 8:19 am
by Ambiguous Realm
it flowed pretty good.. couple repeated multis but enjoyed reading it at a fast pace.. 8/10

Posted: Wed Nov 29, 2006 3:22 am
by ~Symbolikull~
thanx man! it was jus a lil somethin

Posted: Thu Nov 30, 2006 1:42 am
by B-Bear
FlawLess wrote:Adressin That Guy That Said The Bars Are A Bit To Long, There's Really No Certain Length If You Got Multies Inside of Multies An Ever Syllable Is Matched..Goooooooooood Shitt!
True, but that just some shit i got my mind fixed on... just what i like to do, nothin more. the multies were off the hook, and the verse was tight as hell. mad props again ghost!