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Straight off the back I approach it like it was 'crunch'time/
Hitchu wit a fist full of words, now thas a punchline/
I punch lines like boxin a composition/
this game is gettin borin playin myself cus aint no competition/
Listen I am on a mission here/
I'm as complusive as alcoholics when they feel the urge to drink a beer/
Sexually impuslive you can't stop me from rapin ears/
You sharp as a tack, well im sharp as fukn spear/
I'm outta 'here' like dead lice, im dead right/
you dead wrong like biggie said in that one song/
rest in peace i'm off the leash i hold beats by the tongue plus im pullin it's teeth/
i'm raps dentist, menace to society just call me dennis/
still splendid wit this pen in ma palm/
I need it surgically removed cus it feels like its sewed on/
hold on, i'm like a boulder the way jus roll on/
beats, leave it flatter than the pavement in the street/
i'm creative with ma speech, in laymans terms ima beast/
goin against me is foolish, all i gotta do is press delete/
I murder beats til they cant breath/
and get away quicker than mayweather's hand speed/
this shit is all light work, I call it hands free/

Entertaining to some extent.
Felt most your inners were too predictable, as well as your end rhymes/multies.
Try to brainstorm more with your wording and vocab, shit'll just come to you eventually.
W/plays aiight, nothing with a "wow" factor, but decent.
Some of the concepts you went with were pretty fresh. Good shit.
Metas could have been amped up put'n more creativity in your flips and deliveries.

Decent, though.
Keep scribble'n.

'1

I agree with Madeye in the Predictable aspect...
a lot of familiar lines in ya verse...

you have potential.. Keep it up

Was alright, seemed a bit rushed, keep practicing though, that's all I can say.