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tryin to peep but the link isnt working bro. check that shit. and you should feed some shit before you drop. if you have link two or the mods will lock your thread bro. just lettin you know.

How do I get it to work dude?

didnt like the beat even a little bit, just toomuch clutter and not really a good sound.. but aside from that you vocals remind me a lil of easy e. or some Del the funky or ACeyalone

i liked the lyrics thats about it

I did the whole song on the psp in headphones so I can see why it would sound cluttered but thanks for the feedback though. I'm working on the clarity and mixing.

Alright, well the beat: It sounds rather clipped. The electric guitar primarily. What program are you using to make your beats? Unless I have this all wrong and u didn't make the beat. I automatically assumed i guess...

Vocally: Delivery and the concept your going after is pretty cool, except for the pitch shift. Wasn't a fan. Style is there, effects are pretty cool once you start singing during the chorus, but its still a little rough along the edges of quality. What are you recording on? The content was typical, even if the delivery method wasn't. Money, eh, comes and goes homie, like the topic should lol. I noticed you said this is your first complete song ever? Pretty damn good if you ask me, but i admire more the style that ventures, than the style that mimics. That being said, if you were to polish the quality, fix some rushed lines, this would be pretty good. Id critique the beat but i don't know if you made it. You got potential, its just different, like your avy. Thumbs up.


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Feed others pieces man, get active. The more you poke your nose everywhere the more others will poke their nose in your stuff.

I made the beat and did all the vocals on the psp. There is a program called Beaterator by Timbaland and I just started using it not too long ago and it's awesome. You know my step-brother dude. Christian's my step-brother.

and how exactly are you recording yourself into a portable video game console? I didn't even know timberland made sequencers lol. He emailed me some of your stuff, that being said, this isnt your first song Marvin the Martian. Explain how on a psp foo

This is my first complete song. Not my first song. If you want to know more about the psp beaterator look it up.

-- Thu Feb 03, 2011 10:55 pm --

And I really don't understand the hostility towards me. Marvin the Martian? Foo? Whats your deal dude? What do you think I'm fabricating all of this for fun?

-- Thu Feb 03, 2011 11:01 pm --

I appreciate the warm welcome onto the forum. Will I be getting more of that in the future? I just want a heads up of what's to come.

For A Rap Done On A PSP, Fucking Amazing!!! Quality Is Crisp For What You Did. Effects Are Decent. Beat Was Really Cluttered At The Beginning, BUT As The Song Progressed, It Fit You Good. 2nd Verse WIth The Pitch Shift Isn't Really Good IMO, The Lyrics Are Good, But The Pitches Are Off. Check The Semitones/Key You Have Them In. "Pay The Piper, Charge You Twice". . .I've Heard Other Good Lines Here In This Song, But I Was So Focused On Typing That I Didn't Quote Em Lol. Really Good For Wat U Did. I'm Impressed.

definitely got that old school freestyle vibe.. reminded me of Beastie Boys for some reason haha.. but its pretty good tho..

I like it. The beat is riding that sweet *dun dun dun' that get my foot stepping. I can see this being in a movie at a scene like, people are going in to rob a shop or some shit. I like.

On another note.. It's a fucking grimy beat. Real nice.

This is very different man, but I gotta say it isn't bad for the fact u did everything on here, which is really coo...I love the chorus and beat, the verse are ok, I just feel that they were a lil over the top and I didn't feel as tho they were as directional as I would like them, meaning they were a lil all over the place, but the production I thought was nice and gave a quality song here...really good job, just polish of the verse a lil maybe more succint flow, with some switchups and drops, cuz the beat lends well to that...nice track pz.

nice beat dug the flow too...keep it up