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Mind Numb

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Quadrapalegic acrobatics with andro habits flexing muscles pointless/
Like a run on sentence, endless...mind numbing I annoint this/
holy waters, scolding daughters selling sex, spreading diseases/
on the same streets where priests are telling lies and selling jesus/
I fell in pieces, yelling please this here must not be the truth/
that we're all tyrants, life is violence and the bullets proof/
But whos to blame our society for acting this violently/
You can tell its inside you as well as inside of me/
Silence please, with room to breath and understand this/
We were born to be torn in never was inplanted/
I repremanded the left handed because i'm always right/
I see a tunnel, there's a light no it's just the hallways bright/
fall days flight has brought a bitter frost/
I'm amazed a maze has made me dazed and a little lost/
Critters cross the corpses of those fallen forces/
of course at no prevail to my minds numbing fortress/
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"holy waters, scolding daughters selling sex, spreading diseases/
on the same streets where priests are telling lies and selling jesus/
I fell in pieces, yelling please this here must not be the truth/
that we're all tyrants, life is violence and the bullets proof/"

dope so dope in fact it makes the closing seem a bit blah in comparison when really the entire piece is pretty smooth flow was really good also , well overall a decent drop

keep writing
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I gotta say this was a solid drop man ... I dont know if your aiming to send a positive messege or just stating the facts , but either way it was good ... I liked the flow and your word choice throughout this piece ... keeep dropping fam.

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some dope vocab in this for sure and you stayed on topic. this is a dope piece overall would like to read more from ya. stay up
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