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This shit was sick. Audio worthy joint here. Awesome metaphors and wordplay, great flow, nice multies. This shit hit home for real.

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Damn man, you really keep your shit weaved together tightly
nice feel to it, real emotion evoking stuff, I know you don't really WANT to record but you should
it would be a nice look, keep writing man
can't wait to see more stuff like this

Damn, man...my chick and I have had great times and even worse ones. I can't pour my heart out like this...everything about this piece is fucking sick. Good shit man. I'd like to see a collab with ruckus on a topic similar to this...

"Tears turn to paint, drips begin moving out the picture//
Me w/out a woman is like the moon without its glitter//
Grey precipitates, reality sets in & destiny picks the date//
Summer flings start to fall apart, shit turns into a winter break//
Everytime she had me feeling blue -- that shit was navy//
Pat & Demi trying to see it through -- but that bitch was crazy//
Domestic violence, both of us always fight in the street//
What ever we did wrong, we'd just made right in the sheets//"

"Things phase me, trees sway me, I'ma leave baby//
No beauty sleep, maybe you ain't my dream lady//
To me it's late as fuck, to her it's the early morn//
Stuck w/ this dry spell, waiting on the perfect storm//
I'm passive, you're aggressive, both think differently//
Pose' to hit the town... by midnight... she's hitting me?//
Grab her & ask "you're not thinking of leaving right?"//
Beer in my face as she leaves, drinks on me tonight//
Things left in the dark... shit eventually comes to light//
Love to fight, ya fucking right, nails like a cutting knife//"

Yeeeah!!!

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nice post u got here man.... i love the concept

Props on writing such a long piece without getting stale or letting the flow fall off. Looking at the length I thought this was gonna be a bit of a chore to read but before I knew it I was at the end of the third verse. this is probably one of the best things I've read from you, both from a content standpoint and a technical one. The wordplay was as good as I've come to expect from you and not one multi felt forced, either. The only thing that needs to be fixed is: the name of the guy from The Legend of Sleepy Hollow is Ichabod Crane. Overall, seriously good piece here, though.

Icabar Krane dreams, cuz of you pumpkin, I got no head to hold//

What that line is sick... good play on words... damn

Things phase me, trees sway me, I'ma leave baby//

started the 2nd as you ended the first with this play on words and continued through the verse... nicely done

finished strong with the 3rd each verse a little harder then the previous good build up to a good finish.

Great written, goes good verbal... great overall
nicely done...

I can relate to This verse!"drinks on me tonight"luv the way you played with that and"nails like a cutting knife/the violence started from scratch lol.
Things phase me, trees sway me, I'ma leave baby//
No beauty sleep, maybe you ain't my dream lady//
To me it's late as fuck, to her it's the early morn//
Stuck w/ this dry spell, waiting on the perfect storm//
I'm passive, you're aggressive, both think differently//
Pose' to hit the town... by midnight... she's hitting me?//
Grab her & ask "you're not thinking of leaving right?"//
Beer in my face as she leaves, drinks on me tonight//
Things left in the dark... shit eventually comes to light//
Love to fight, ya fucking right, nails like a cutting knife//
The violence started from scratch, now we're bloody//
If those upstairs hate me, then those down there love me!!!//
Course it'll hurt, hit the floor, pour, absorb in the earth//
I'd sell my soul, but honestly that shit cost more than its worth//
Turn my soul into dirt, the date on friday nights expired//
A match made in hell, she had me walking in the line of fire//
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It's like the devil said "Cory hold these apples for me"//
You owe me alimony god dammit, exorcist over holy matrimony//

I think u hit the heart of every illest member! I can def relate to this i think everyone can in there own way and that alone is a great thing. Id like to hear this piece over an instrumental

To me it's late as fuck, to her it's the early morn//
Stuck w/ this dry spell, waiting on the perfect storm//

^^ those lines hit me the most man
Great drop!

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you put me in dream land hear cory fukin gifted spit here boy...........