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I got a fire in my chest, inviting minds to try ingest/
Lines that I have bind and pressed, the fight personifies my death/
With time to rise up to the mess, providing I’ve had trying tests/
Colliding grinding every step, so I have rightly yet assessed/
I’m like Noah’s Ark' Spectators floating farther from the ground/
Just trying to keep my head above water before I finally drown/
So I paddle away, wade, and pray for an eighth day/
Courage and great strength, determined to make way/
If I was a barnacle then, maybe I’d stake claim/
maybe id brake free from rocks encourage and take aim
I’ve seen traps in a distance yet I’d sin and trip over’em/
can’t react with resilience and consistently shoulder’em/
I’m chiseled in dads image, yet my vision is focused in/
Dirty mirrors that have me riddled cus my description isnt his/
Why do you insist to do this, and give me the kiss of Judas/
Or is it my own fault i still grow trees so very fruitless/

Flow was good here. The lyrics felt very personal. I can't say I understood what they all meant 100% but the gist I got was pretty deep and self reflective. Good drop over all.

I like this one. Favorite lines-
"So I paddle away, wade, and pray for an eighth day/
Courage and great strength, determined to make way"
&
"I’m chiseled in dads image, yet my vision is focused in/
Dirty mirrors that have me riddled cus my description isnt his/
Why do you insist to do this, and give me the kiss of Judas/
Or is it my own fault i still grow trees so very fruitless"

I think that you aim for abstract, so sometimes it's hard to see the big picture. Your individual abstract metaphors are great, just a little hard to connect sometimes. Overall it's dope, like a party in Citrus Heights. Except the good kind of dope.

solid lil 16, flow was flawless, structure on point, nice use of multies, couple rhymes a lil forced in some parts, but all in all some nice shit.

I’m chiseled in dads image, yet my vision is focused in/
Dirty mirrors that have me riddled cus my description isnt his

That was deep, I like the way it flow, keep the same strength throughout. Good drop for sure.

thanks for feeding fellows. one love.

got a fire in my chest, inviting minds to try ingest/
Lines that I have bind and pressed, the fight personifies my death/
With time to rise up to the mess, providing I’ve had trying tests/
Colliding grinding every step, so I have rightly yet assessed/
I’m like Noah’s Ark' Spectators floating farther from the ground/
Just trying to keep my head above water before I finally drown


my fav part ^

nice shit kerep it up!

Thought this was def a dope verse. The flow on this was ill, the meanings were... well, meaningful. The vocab usage was well used. Enjoyed the read a lot...

I’m like Noah’s Ark' Spectators floating farther from the ground/
Just trying to keep my head above water before I finally drown/

best bar in my opinion.
was kind of iffy in some places, but solid for the most part
def better then some of ya other stuff iv'e read. keep dropping

thanks for taking the time to read and feed guys. much love.