Hip Hop Forum

shit man i aint just hungry for money shit i need a deal
i cant keep spending my life scrounging with out a peak at real
i feel to cheap to steal so im snaggin ropes and chains
i try not to fall off but under the pressure i choke and strain
provoking pain like the evilness that is contained in vane
hoping for money but with riches will i remain unchanged
my brains insane pondering if i will ever reach or hit the top
it feels like i'm stuck in traffic stalled cause the grid is locked
i fib a lot lying to my self cause the truth is hard and harsh
sometimes i feel like a small fish thats guarding sharks
this god is dark cause oviously he or she doesnt care for me
some people live while others die shit seems unfair to me
it rare to see me on the down starving for some attention
i'm tired of being poor an pissed wit no way to leak aggression
with mean intentions cause i don't know any way out
i played the cards and bet on it hard but shit just didnt play out
i break down cause this world must of had it out for me
but i'll rise above it all and shatter this gods doubt in me
i doubt you'll see what it is that i'm suffering an starving for
shit i dont know but its hip hop that got me carving broke

feed it hate or love its up to you

Good shit, rhymescheme was nice and simple but that made the flow easy to catch and everything was structrally on point, nice multies, this shit would sound dope over a beat, stay at it.

uppin`

It's easy to relate to, you stayed on topic and the flow seems smooth and simple. I'd like to read more, maybe mix up the scheme a little bit at later points. Overall, good shit, keep writing.

pretty good. kinda reminds me a little too much of eminem's rock bottom. but that's cool.