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tried to do a little story

i love story tracks...
piano intro is nice.. this is also a really good track.. props man.. you been stepping your game up... The hook is sick to.. good stuff man..

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This is nice, def can hear improvement in ur flow, the words don't get meshed together like in some of ur others audio pieces. Some of your first drops I wasn't feelin' too much, but recently u've dropped a couple tracks that I think are pretty damn good. I think u still need to work on ur vocal mixing a bit. And there's def still room for improvement, but this shows a helluva lot of improvement. Keep it up and u'll be droppin consistent fire soon...

The melody is dope, but i recognize it from somewhere. Smooth"er" flow than your previous tracks, so dope. Delievery is nice man, a couple rushed lines. I forgot who said it in the elevation section, but "sometimes less is more". Chorus fits smoothly. The computer im on isnt the best listening, but your vocals seem a little loud. Other than that pretty dope. In my personal opinion, you dont have to take me serious, i think that profanity takes away from a touching subject if used incorrectly. Solid drop man.

I like the piano and the chorus sample that comes in. Good beat choice. Your delivery is a bit monotonous but the lyrics are good and your flow fits over the beat nice. Your delivery is what's holding you back. I like the song, just keep practicing and that delivery will come along.

Also with your writing, every once in a while it sounded like you had maybe 1 too many syllables in a line and rushed to fit it in.

I like the outro. Personal touch. Keep up man.

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