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Another slow piece I found in my junk that I recorded a while ago. Spoken type, so don't expect blazing lyrics or kick ass chorus. Enjoy I guess.

I liked it, though think it would be improved if ur delivery had more emotion in it. The beat and your lyrics have a lot of latent emotion, but not so much in ur delivery. But, other than that suggestion, I think this is well done, though maybe that first spoken word verse could be mixed a bit better. I like ur writing style a lot, a lot of depth expressed with clarity. Nice drop man...

i LOVE your writing style homie. as stated above your delivery is off a bit but i have zero room to speak on that. your lyrics are raw, beat is raw, i think you mixed it well also. i like how the first part of the verse seems effected then comes in clear when the beat drops. skill bro. keep that shit up. this probly my fav thing ive heard from you.

Cadence, I appreciate the feed man. At the time i recorded this, i was rapping directly into a built in mic on a laptop and using Sony Acid. So my delivery had to stay way calm and monotone to sound decent lol. Maybe ill re record it now that i have a real"er" set up. Thanks for enjoying my words none the less.

BlokB, I appreciate you noticing the effect dropping and clarity dropping when the beat dropped. I was going for that. Thanks for the feed man, and appreciate the compliments. Kinda funny to believe your favorite track from me is when i was extremely limited on how to deliver and tools. Thanks man.

cool that you even did a drop like this, good piece, deep and good flow wit it,

The "light a fire in this cold world and put it out wit a tear" line was tight

"cool that you even did a drop like this," <-- I want to take it as a compliment, but im not sure. Thanks for feeding man, I appreciate it. That line you quoted took me forever to come up with, so im glad someone liked it lol. Thanks man.

Damn. I'm Feeling This Man. For A Built In Mic, You Fuckin Did An Amazing Job. Vocab/Delivery Is Insane. I Found Myself Closing My Eyes And Just Listening To The Words. "This Earth Is Beautiful When You Look Passed The Cold". Deep. Your Voice Kind Of Sounds Like Cashis To Me HAHAHA Jus More Hip Hop And Deeper. "Life Sucks Without Practice" I Feel Your 2nd Verse Sounded Better Than Your First. You Have Some Deep Concepts Here, And I Really enjoy It. I Might Have To Type Out Your Lyrics And Try To Decipher Some Of What You Were Saying To Understand The Cores Of Them. Really Good Listen Man, Enjoyed It!

lyrics are deep man, way feelings it.. your voice is so flat but has so much emotion behind it.. this track is just great haha.. gotta look up more of your stuff man..

2xS, i appreciate the feed man, i used t be better with less equipment. lol. I spent a lot of time writing those lyrics, glad to see you enjoyed them.

Deciple, Thanks for the feed and the hope that youll follow more of my stuff. Im really not all that good, i just fluke sometimes lol.

I love the vibe. The mixing fits the mood and the lyrics are nice enough for this type of piece. It sounds way better before the kicks come in. Your spoken word take on it sounded better without em. Overall I like it, maybe try the spoken word theme for an intro to a track then come in with more conventional rapping. Keep it up.

This is one of those drops I like better after every listen... and I've listened to it quite a few times... in my book that's the sign of a good song

Col, I appreciate it man, my roots are in spoken word so im 10 times more willing to do that than anything. Thanks

Cadence, you just made my day teach, knowing someones willing to listen to something of mine more than once lol.