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freewritten to sharpen the blades

Posted: Sun Dec 19, 2010 5:22 pm
by knowconscience
I heat seek with precision
breathe deep,spit venom to defeat the opposition
heavy mental,write masterpiece upon leafs
trained rugged to kill in impossible conditions
tongue and cheek,swallow my pride with no chaser
implode the earth,ashes and sediments,glowing vapors
abstract art pumping illness to my heart
so I bleed negative thoughts
sentimental to my forms that I preform
suck up the worlds nutrients
and write my last verse in a rage thunder storm

Re: freewritten to sharpen the blades

Posted: Sun Dec 19, 2010 6:58 pm
by MesaR
pretty basic here bro, i can see potential though you're vocab wasn't to bad.

your best line, wasn't a punch but actually a set up witch is all apart of elevation, or wording your shit better and fitting it in..

tongue and cheek,swallow my pride with no chaser

^ cool.

Re: freewritten to sharpen the blades

Posted: Sun Dec 19, 2010 10:45 pm
by Momeijah
I can tell you're talented I just wouldn't mind seeing a longer more thought out drop on this topic. I know it's just a quickie to get the momentum back but it had some nice lines.

abstract art pumping illness to my heart
so I bleed negative thoughts

^I thought that was pretty dope.

Decent flow and inners, good perspective and creativity. Keep droppin.