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Together...
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 4:38 pm
by Borat
Finally!...i did it, i cracked the alphabet, scrambled it, and served her "love" for breakfast...in bed, she would find my heart beat and bob her head to the sound, like a new age love song
Gone by sunrise to catch the morning train...these day dreams of me and her, defer my chance to catch a wink of sleep
so its off to work to get that pretty pennie she always asked for... maybe it will be my lucky day, i'll go home and say..."i brought home the bacon...now kiss the cook"
such a long day, but don't worry...i somehow find humor in the fact that the "Nights still young" and we're still here "growing older"...ha, well at least we're 'together'
Leave Feed Please...Thanks
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 4:44 pm
by complexity
creative
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 4:46 pm
by Borat
yes very
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 4:59 pm
by drunken jesus
not really too creative or innovational, looks like something slug would write if he didn't rhyme
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 5:01 pm
by Borat
compared to slug...good enough for me
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 5:07 pm
by drunken jesus
his rap songs, not his spoken word lol
listen to some spoken word artists, you don't really write shit in poetic form, its just random stories that don't rhyme
peep buddy wakefield, hes on sage francis' label, hes dope at spoken word shit, eyedea's pretty nice with it too
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 5:17 pm
by Borat
yes yes...buddy wakefield...i follow all of them...heard of Saul Williams?...good stuff
Posted: Wed Nov 08, 2006 5:20 pm
by drunken jesus
of course
Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 8:16 am
by Borat
for sam!... haha enjoy i figured i would help you find it haha
Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 10:02 pm
by LadySam
Finally!...i did it, i cracked the alphabet, scrambled it, and served her "love" for breakfast...in bed, she would find my heart beat and bob her head to the sound, like a new age love song
Gone by sunrise to catch the morning train...these day dreams of me and her, defer my chance to catch a wink of sleep
so its off to work to get that pretty pennie she always asked for... maybe it will be my lucky day, i'll go home and say..."i brought home the bacon...now kiss the cook"
such a long day, but don't worry...i somehow find humor in the fact that the "Nights still young" and we're still here "growing older"...ha, well at least we're 'together'
i copied the whole thing coz its jus awesome..make more of these plz i enjoy reading them
=O i frickin love this! 10 outa 10!!
short simple and lovelyyyyy
i read it alot wen im bored it makes me smile
<3 excellent job jesse
Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2007 7:58 am
by Borat
Greatttt... feedback, i will make more just for you haha... give me a topic and i would be glad to write on it... im kinda dead with topics, haha sooo find me one and i would be happy to write =)
Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2007 2:30 pm
by precise
lol coulda swore i left feedback on this ages ago
but anyways, shit was dope as hell
i loooved this line:
so its off to work to get that pretty pennie she always asked for... maybe it will be my lucky day, i'll go home and say..."i brought home the bacon...now kiss the cook"
so many diff refernces in it
good shit man, as usual haha
Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2007 4:25 pm
by Borat
haha thanks man... i got a shit load more... i just got my net back on sooo you all will be seeing alot more of me... and that is probably the best thing that could happen to your lives... =) lmfao...