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"Sequence the life saver of hip hop equipped with that paramedic skill
i got the best lines while you guys show off nothing like an anorexic build"
^^^ that's solid, liked how u kept the punch medical with paramedic and anorexic.

"Never the best on the academic filed i was never fond of the straight A's
or a pay raise, but seq remain one over the week so consider me eight days
i love the negative feedback and hate votes so please don't doubt no other
while really your more faggot like then young kids in a tap out jumper"
^^^ did u mean to say field? On the first line... if done on purpose its a funny way to show what you're saying. Not really sure about the 8 days thing... maybe I'm just not cool enough to know what that means. I don't know what tap out jumper is either. Flows good though.

"Check what i rap bout brother my styles the blinding type like a high beam
sweet like ice cream, move up the ranks i got kinetic energy in my rhyme scheme
so listen up, i'm more attached then tight jeans around the thigh region
don't try breathing cause you not a spitter your style is more dry reaching"
^^^ tight jeans line is good, but the dry reaching took away from its hit... thought u could have punched better. Good none the less.

"you'll die screaming with your eyes bleeding if you step to my game son
I've been offered for battles but guess how many that actually came...none"
^^^ good flow, but ur record shows otherwise lol.

All in all good drop man, flow was there, punches were nice, but that first bars my favorite. Keep droppin man, ill keep reading.

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Some dope shit here, dunno how it will flow with a beat cuz the bars seem stretched out. Im guessin you wrote this acapella. Dope bars man keep writing

The whole flow was pretty nice...got some witty lines in this...when I got to the spitting line I thought u was going to say dry heaving and I was going to be like OH SHIT but...it was dry reaching which I didnt understand but u did ur thing with this nice agressive piece

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This was pretty good. You started off strong and faded a little bit after the middle. Some lines didn't hit but you had some dope ones in there:

Sequence the life saver of hip hop equipped with that paramedic skill
i got the best lines while you guys show off nothing like an anorexic build
never the best on the academic filed i was never fond of the straight A's
or a pay raise, but seq remain one over the week so consider me eight days
i love the negative feedback and hate votes so please don't doubt no other
while really your more faggot like then young kids in a tap out jumper
^^^That was dope. I went to an MMA fight earlier this year and I saw a bunch of guys with over-inflated egos rockin those jumpers lol.

so listen up, i'm more attached then tight jeans around the thigh region
don't try breathing cause you not a spitter your style is more dry reaching
^^^The setup was nice but for reference, it's dry retching or dry heaving (which would've made the punch hit harder). I've never heard of dry reaching but w/e, to each his own.

Overall, nice drop duke.

Some nice shit here, bars were stretched a bit and a couple lines were hit and miss, but you finished up mad strong with

"so listen up, i'm more attached then tight jeans around the thigh region
don't try breathing cause you not a spitter your style is more dry reaching
you'll die screaming with your eyes bleeding if you step to my game son
I've been offered for battles but guess how many that actually came...none"

closed the shit on a good note, good lil verse.

hey dude, i think i may be able to help u with that dry retching/reaching dilema. my mate n i were talkin bout it the otha day funny enough lol heaps of ppl in australia say reaching but yes ur right in fact its retching. at least u knew wat he was talkin bout right? lol
yeah nice verse mesar, i rememba u spittin me sum of these lines a couple of weeks ago.

i got the best lines while you guys show off nothing like an anorexic build
^^^ Love that line man, try n use it in 'got beef'

Lyrical Gen wrote:This was pretty good. You started off strong and faded a little bit after the middle. Some lines didn't hit but you had some dope ones in there:

Sequence the life saver of hip hop equipped with that paramedic skill
i got the best lines while you guys show off nothing like an anorexic build
never the best on the academic filed i was never fond of the straight A's
or a pay raise, but seq remain one over the week so consider me eight days
i love the negative feedback and hate votes so please don't doubt no other
while really your more faggot like then young kids in a tap out jumper
^^^That was dope. I went to an MMA fight earlier this year and I saw a bunch of guys with over-inflated egos rockin those jumpers lol.

so listen up, i'm more attached then tight jeans around the thigh region
don't try breathing cause you not a spitter your style is more dry reaching
^^^The setup was nice but for reference, it's dry retching or dry heaving (which would've made the punch hit harder). I've never heard of dry reaching but w/e, to each his own.

Overall, nice drop duke.

"seq remain one over the week so consider me eight days"

best line, imo it is better to write weak how you meant it and allow your punch to pop nice overall kingpen shit

BE EASY

not the hardest ive read from you bruh. rhyme scheme was there, few multies, dope concept. but it just didnt hit me like your other work. all in all it was still raw needless to say. just not my favorite from you. keep it up sir.

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never the best on the academic filed i was never fond of the straight A's
or a pay raise, but seq remain one over the week so consider me eight days

i reference the "eight day" alot in my writing. prolly why i dig th bar.