Hip Hop Forum

a few of my friends and I had an 8 bar challenge which was basically us listening to a beat for 30 min and then deciding who had the best 8 bars. This was my entry:

Victory follows me like my shadow
if you rewrote history, maybe you'd beat me in a battle
The crown is just a formality, a symbol, in reality
I'm lyrically superior evolved past abnormalities
I'm proud of me; so whoever cares to doubt me
will fall and bow, when I unravel nouns I found to talk about me
I'm excellent, intelligent, elegant and magnificent
and quick to vent when I'm in the presence of mediocrity
Honestly, your tiger golf-swing, sub-par mentality
causes me to take a fence like stealing gates from where houses be
your sound is weak, your streak is wack, your raps are disasters
leave the track, get back and go, let a pro show you his masters
I'll ravage instrumentals, a savage lyrical beast
A serial killer, I snap, crackle and feast
on every beat in my vicinity, no mercy is shown
my rhymes are the next caliber like the sword in the stone