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my latest experimental track.

For some reason I like the instrumental lol, although its all over the place. The mixing needs work, because the effects on ur voice takover the beat at times. The rhyming is clean man, its unique, a may need a smoother delivery cause at some points ur choppy, but otherwise nice lyrics. U have replay value in those lyrics...The chorus is interesting but needs more emotion and voice inflection, overall not bad just work on those few things.

Man, this is definitly good, I'd put it on my cd mix and bump it between Cage and Fort Minor. I agree with Livenlearn, the chorus needs a little more emotion in it, although I like how the emotion built in your delivery towards the end chorus, so maybe it was done on purpose. Definitly some ill stuff man.

thank you kind sirs, it's one of my more interesting songs.

Yeah your rhyme scheme is def. what i like.. just like LivenLearn said.. The beat is all over but i like it.. if you put alittle bit more energy in the delivery this would be a killer track.. its kinda mono for me... Its a good track man.. got me wanting to hear more

RAW! love the beat. turn the vocal down tho or maybe just the effect. RAW BRO! your lyrics remind me of our fallen eyedea. delivery not so much but your style kills the beat i feel. engineering tweaks is all bro. hot!

yeah this beat was definitely all over the place but it was pretty good for the most part. the hook needs something added to it to make it sound different from the verses so you know its actually a hook. its nice just needs some more energy too. mixing was pretty clean, flow was on point for the most part. not a bad track man, keep doin ya thing. holla

good shit homie, the beat was tight and you went over it well. The flow was laidback sounding, but it seemed to work in my opinion. Good listen

I Like This. Unique, Different, And Not Expected. Quality Was Decent IMO, I Do Feel A Comparison To Linkin Park Or Something Of A Mix Between Rock/Rap With You. You Have That Voice That Just Says "I Wanna Scream On This Track, But I'm Not Gonna". Lyrics Are Good. I Think That You Might Wanna Turn the Vocals Down Just A Tad. They Overpower. You're Very Monotone. Try Adding More Emotion And Energy. Overall, Good Track!

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Im feeling this joint a lot esp the beat real tight its def different I liked how you attacked the track the hook is fyre too