Hip Hop Forum

now heres some hip hop im sick of these wack rappers/
spittin repition so does polly wanna cracker/
rollin up a blunt now you enterin to my zone/
touch me, im not a touch screen like the iphone/
hit ya like a cyclone, now let me remind you/
i'll find you, blind you infect you like the swine flu/
you'll need to call the docta, for fuckin witta shotta/
gangster, smoke clears im chillin like a rosta/
but at these givin minute im feelin flyer then a redbull/
if it gives you wings then im flyin to the heavens/
that's wat i told the reverend, he said i need jesus/
christ o mightey im thinkin can you beleive this/ (na)
sorry but you gone have to manage ya luck/
cuz my flow a lil crazy it need shakles and cuffs/
it dont take a real lot just to damage you punks/
cuz your future is off a cliff wit you slammed in the trunk/

this was ok...has potential to be a dope piece had a few lines I thought that coulda been better but you kinda let it fall flat but it was a key so no real complaints from me...nice lil drop man keep doing u

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Much better than your last drop, nice even 16 bars, the structure was on point, flow was good, the rhymes is still simple but stay at it and keep practicing.