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experimenting with some double time type shit. Gotta spit it quick to get the flow. My bad if the structure sucks, couldn't really find where to put the / where it'd define the flow. Anyways...

I know this war is ugly, but you act like you were forced to love me/
Gettin divorced, but you kept a portrait of me?
You say that i'm sort of lucky, but I don't need another whore to judge me/
You swore you trust me, but what's more disgusting is how you check my phone so you can scorn and cuss me/
Cuz you swore you bust me, so you can push me out the door and shove me, you want an award or something?/
But the course was one thing, drama was the source of most of this but you won't hold ownership/
Nope, you just throw the kids in my dome as soon as I go to split, talking bout some homeless shit/
Like I won't clothe and dish some extra bones to get my little girls the new Jonas flick/
But still you moan and bitch, thought you would notice it, but i'm alone now, bitch, I don't owe you shit/
But its plain apparent how i'm their favorite parent cuz you couldn't shut yer mouth to save the marriage/
I bet that aches a fair bit, but hey you claim i'm careless, i'm not the one who's ashamed, embarrassed/
But I'd hate to bear it, wanted change and you got it now, thought you had me chained til the lock was found/
Now you got nowhere to blame all the problems now so I know its not the same with me not around/
But I remain on the solid ground, you can't drown me in guilt and resentment, I was built to prevent it/
But I still should have went when the chill in my senses said that the thrill was expended/
So now you're feelin offended, defenseless cuz you I know i'm speakin the truth, but what's the meanin to you/
Cuz you'll just weave an excuse, I won't even reason with you, fuck it, i'm leavin,.we're through/

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Damn, another one man. To be honest, Eminem popped in my head when I read this cause he has been using double time in his rhyme structure alot lately.

But its plain apparent how i'm their favorite parent cuz you couldn't shut yer mouth to save the marriage/
I bet that aches a fair bit, but hey you claim i'm careless, i'm not the one who's ashamed, embarrassed/
But I'd hate to bear it, wanted change and you got it now, thought you had me chained til the lock was found/
Now you got nowhere to blame all the problems now so I know its not the same with me not around/
^^^This was the best part of this verse, pure illness. Has an emotional feel with the double time rhyme like "Spacebound" did.

Overall, another tight verse duke. Keep up the good work.

Damn dude, powerful emotion. The flow is ill as always, but the raw emotion is what makes this piece incredible. I'm damn sorry to hear ur gettin divorced though (unless this is a topical piece, but I don't think it could be with the amount of emotion put in it).

IntrinsicCadence wrote:Damn dude, powerful emotion. The flow is ill as always, but the raw emotion is what makes this piece incredible. I'm damn sorry to hear ur gettin divorced though (unless this is a topical piece, but I don't think it could be with the amount of emotion put in it).

^^^Sorry to hear that like I said in your other drop Ruck (that type of emotion can't be fabricated or at least it's highly unlikely that you could whip that up outta nowhere).

Excellent my friend.

At least you live in Alaska, it would be hassle free to bury the hatchet under a apple tree.

See me winking...

Thanks for the feed yall. And yes, this is all true shit here, no topical unfortunately. But if you've been on this site over the past couple years, you won't be surprised that it came to this (again). Peep my other drops like "wHole" and "Gone"... similar topic, different execution and rhyme schemes. Don't forget "Bed of Nails" too lol.