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More fears in my dreams than there are leaves propped up on trees
but for mine and time's sake I'll just relate my top three
at night inside my bed before I drift away to sleep
I hope and pray that while I lay my mind will stick to counting sheep
you'd agree being 20,000 leagues under the sea
is frightening, but me I drown in every dream that I see
while anvils are tied to my feet, I panic and claw at oxygen leaks
no air, so i'll die before someone comes after me
if you were neglected at three, forced to step-up and be
the best, if you wanted success, why you expect to sleep?
The motion of oceans, turning, twisting, pulling me down
moves me further from the surface, futilely i wish to be found
lost in a maze, a daze, crazy sounds fill my ears
i open my eyes to find no water around me but tears
it's a swirl of emotions, even though details are lost
i vividly remember the frozen cold December frost
It seems to permeate my soul, leaking into my subconscious
no matter what continent, I can't escape from this monstrous
and terrifying beast that seeks to feast on my pride
its a lion, tiger and bear that tears me deeply inside
i can't hide, i can't run. how can you escape from yourself?
how can you function when something's munchin' on the fear that it smelt?
It's like Hell on earth, like depression's perched over the door
it's a swift black bird that will depart- Nevermore.

Good Read guys. I think the topics are sooo simple that they are difficult to write about and put an original flip to it. I thought one of you guys would use the Freddie type blood and guts deal, but you both came at it as if it's an actual problem you're experiencing. So I felt the emotion. But without further adu and all that...

Cats: (Since both are using the same topic, originality will be hard to come by unless you did one hell of a flip, so visual and lyrical strength of the content is what I voted on)

Metaphores - Rugged (He had some vivid imagery with crazy meaning ie cracked spoons, closet bathrooms, etc.)

Multies - Rugged ("Comatose in a catacomb full of scattered bones, a disaster zone//") that was a "whoa" moment.

Flow - Prince (quite easy to read; however that may not always be a plus in topical as it can have a monotone type feel)

Complexity - Rugged (Prince's seemed kind of last minute rushed actually. Rugged's had moments of oh's and ah's in it.

Creativity - Tie (Neither of you brought a different flip to it I thought, just basically brought your own images to the verse)

Most Memorable - Rugged (Again great imagery that stuck with me and made me go back and read it again)


Quotables:
Rugged - "Airing pills, Seroquill soaks through the mucus membrane//
Eyes oozing, gruesome red stains all over moving bed frames//
Such illusive head games, waking up w/ grueling neck pains//
Inducive, yet strange, so confused, no clue what to do to get changed//"
"Puke lifts up my throat, vivid images of open stab wounds//
Folded crack spoons, I roll over & go to the closest bathroom//"
"No floating, the moment my eyes close into a blackened hole//
Comatose in a catacomb full of scattered bones, a disaster zone//"

Prince - "It seems to permeate my soul, leaking into my subconscious
no matter what continent, I can't escape from this monstrous"

MVGT - Rugged

First Off Nice Battle Guys Atleast Both Of You Showed Up To This..The Verses Were Very Well Put Together Both Had Alot Of Imagery.Creativity Like The Way You Both Handled The Topic..Anyway On With The Cat's



Metaphores-Rugged


Multie's-Rugged (Had Some Very Nice Multi's In There)


Flow-Prince (Felt His Flowed Consistently Through Out The Verse)


Creativity-Tie (Felt You Both Came Quite Nicely With This Both Had Alot Of Imagery)





Prince-
The motion of oceans, turning, twisting, pulling me down
moves me further from the surface, futilely i wish to be found

My Fav Bar From You


Rugged-
Airing pills, Seroquill soaks through the mucus membrane//
Eyes oozing, gruesome red stains all over moving bed frames//


Liked Them 2 Lines Alot

I Felt Both Of You Came At This Quite Nicely,Both Peice's Were A Very Nice Read


Overall My Vote Goes To Rugged

I don't believe there are any set voting categories so I'll just go like this:

Creativity - Tie
Both spun it a little differently but were equally creative. Rugged went in the direction more of how it felt to be afraid where as Da Prince told us what he was afraid of.

Imagery - Rugged
The use of metaphors and a more complex vocabulary added that extra element that helped you to feel what he was saying more than just reading it.

Multies - Rugged
Da Prince had some Rugged had more. More complex ones, too. He made good use of inner rhymes as well.

Flow - Tie
Not much to say here. I was able to pick up and keep with both easily.

Favorite lines:

Rugged:

Airing pills, Seroquill soaks through the mucus membrane//
Eyes oozing, gruesome red stains all over moving bed frames//
Such illusive head games, waking up w/ grueling neck pains//
Inducive, yet strange, so confused, no clue what to do to get changed//

DaPrince:

you'd agree being 20,000 leagues under the sea
is frightening, but me I drown in every dream that I see

Overall, I think Rugged took this pretty easily. Prince had a decent verse; Rugged had a great one.

+1 Rugged