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I changed the batting order: Rnd 1: aL-b/Deth Rnd 2: Deth/aL-b

This dude came with high marks ya see, wit a sig resembling glossaries
Watch me deliver a Deth Stryque that’ll slip his disc awkwardly

Smoke his “prolific experience” like colossal trees, no dodgin’ these
I got him whipped like Willow Smith’s head “bob and weave”

You wanna brawl with speech? Tryin' to get your clout on the rise again?
Deth, I'll rip your respect from you quicker than Black kids winnin Heismens

Yea, K-Killah gave you a plug, but all I see is a sunken socket
How you aimin with Deth Stryques when you missin’ the fuckin target?

I suggest you walk with caution through this valley of Deth
with your signature full of syllables that look highly inept

I gives a fuk bout your experience, I’ll damage your bars
And leave you in horror like Brandi’s loss in Dancin With Starz

Deth from cancerous scars that spark from masterpieces
That’ll stop your heart quicker than cops askin ‘ for Visas

If you hood rich watch as I smash your glass Adidas
You come flashin' your “vet status”, kid I’m past prestigious

Fast with thesis, but let’s all Hail the latest vet with rapid attributes
What a massive debut but Dude really, can you post by this afternoon?

We’re all highly anticipating the wrath of you and your Deth of Mortals
But the actual truth is you’re an illegal that couldn’t get past the borders

IN ALL CAPS I’LL SLAUGHTER robbin’ ya trademark in your signature section
As you reminiscing on matches with cats who made an impression

You still tryin to “blow up” while I’m “droppin’ bombs” as reminders
That’ll leave you in the deeper craters than Chilean minors


...I got bored waiting around for you to get off working OT at Fed-ex or UPS or wherever the hell you shippin' packages from LOL Lookin fwd to seein' ya skillz ...
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you still keyin' Deth? LOL, I'll check back later.

okay keyin now

-- Sun Nov 21, 2010 7:29 am --

Jesus CHRIST.this site ATE MY RHYME 6 TIMES and JUST ATE IT AGAIN...at least it shows that it has an appetite for dope lyrics.

-- Sun Nov 21, 2010 12:58 pm --
HANUKKAH:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hanukkah

AL B. SURE,IN EFFECT MODE,NITE N DAY:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Al_B._Sure!

PARTHENON:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Parthenon

RAMADAN:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ramadan

GYROJETS:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gyrojet

OCTOMOM:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nadya_Suleman

STINGERS (MISSILES):http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/FIM-92_Stinger

Git rowdy,aL-b? I'll growl heat right away so ride away! If you're effin with Deth then you'll die today!
Cuz aL-b//AL B. SURE//I'LL BE SURE "IN EFFECT MODE" when my TEN N TEK FLOWS gives ya CHIN N CHEST HOLES "NITE N DAY"!!
I'm surprised you didn't write n say:"

aLb wrote:-Why the fuk aren't my kids in bed, yet? One of them's a toddler!

They're startin tuh disrespect you cuz they now know what Deth knew: YES DUDE! I'M THEIR REAL FATHER!!!!
Peel ya grill like veal cobbler! Deth uh scalp ya while flexin uh style tuh
Make this BITCH DISAPPEAR like THE INVISIBLE GIRL n rename you JESSICA aL-b(a)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dpgYTCyr ... 17&index=9
Speak game tuh TEKKEN kapow ya! Now ya sleepin,aL ya BEEF n DETH UH CORRAL YA!
aL ya CREEP! You STEP N I SHALL CUH...lapse (collapse) ya hat rack with blazin zingers
Here's PROOF you're ON THE CRACK PIPE: this WAKK GUY'S on a RAP SITE while BITIN THE NAME OF A 80'S SINGER!!
I'm RECITIN SICC SLANG like RABIES FEVER in the BRAIN OF THE REAVER n 80 STINGER FLAME YA DEMEANOR!!
I'm SLAYIN YA WEAK HERBS with the BLADE OF A CLEAVER n the HANGIN PROCEDURE GAME OF THE REAPER!!

(hahaha,switch it up)

I'll HOCK A BOMB that DROP KIDS LIKE OCTOMOM n STRIP YA FLESH like PIRANHA SPAWN
I'll PUT THE FIFTH N 'IM,LIFTIN HIM like "LITHIUM"...n I DON'T MEAN THE NIRVANA SONG!!
My rhymes RING like I WROTE MY VERSE ON A GONG n FADE THIS NERD like HERBS ON A BONG
Jerk I'm a DON! So it AIN'T CAMELS CROONING when my AMMO'S BOOMIN a LLAMA PSALM til ya DRAMA'S GONE!!
Beat me? IMPOSSIBLE like Al-Qaeda hyped up HANUKKAH DURIN RAMADAN!!
One punch this punk bitch HEART IS GONE n I'll CRUMBLE HIS ROOF like THE PARTHENON
In a RUMBLE THIS YOUTH I'LL CARPET BOMB til his CARCASS' STOMPED tuh PARMESAN!
I make STARLETTES FAWN!! Your ROGAIN BROKE GAME can't get HARLOTS THONGS!
My can blam uh STRETCH YA ON THE SAND...like YOU'RE GETTIN YA STARFISH ON!!
Put THE IRON TO HIS PARENTS n STARCH HIS MOM n idle her vitals with psycho lead
I'm "DETHSTRYQUE" not "DETH STRYGUE"! HOW YA DUMB ASS FUCK UP YOUR OWN TITLE THREAD?!
Run up? I'll TAKE OFF ON YOU like GYROJETS n CATCH YOU IN A TWIST like SPIRAL WEBS
Think you sicc? Trick I'll CURE YOU like VIRAL MEDS n IT'S A WRAP FOR YOUR DOME like CAIRO HEADS!!
Spit syllable missile SILO THREATS tuh SCUD ya guts n punk ya quick!
N KILLAH didn't plug me! He gave me the SLUG HEAT tuh PUMP YA WITH n SLUMP YA CLICK!!

Deth, is it open for votes yet, or do we go a 2nd round first then open it for voting?

Fuk, if I made a mistake, let me know man.

aLb wrote:Deth, is it open for votes yet, or do we go a 2nd round first then open it for voting?

Fuk, if I made a mistake, let me know man.

Gotta go to a ROUND 2 brutha,otherwise I get to flip you unfairly AND had more bars to boot.So Round 2 just even up the bar count...kick ya bar count up a few notches and we're in there.Smoove? Thanks for your patience,it was a rainy strange day with lotsa extra overtime at work that turned out to be semi-mandatory; then I had to borrow a friend's computer.All of this conspired to delay my keystyles.

-- Tue Nov 23, 2010 10:46 am --

Droppin 2morrow morning

-- Fri Nov 26, 2010 3:10 am --

Keyed it up yesterday,my lil bruh told me it didn't post. Celebratin with the fam now,key it up 2morrow

Uppin for Round 2

TARTAR:Means HELL as well as a reference to extreme radical invaders and SURFACE TO AIR MISSILES (RIM TARTAR).

CARNIES: old skool slang for carnival workers who have booths set up in carnivals

GULLET: means "throat"

MAKE TRACKS/BARGAINED WITH SWIZZ: Swizz Beats reference.

TARPALIN BIBS: the big bibs that cover babies' chests...

BIG TOP= slang for a girl givin great blow jobs

CLOSET/NARNIA:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Chroni ... e_Wardrobe



ROUND 2:

BEAT: BIG STY: IT'S A PROBLEM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c8q8RREkKmQ

I start rappin while BIG STY'S talking...



Savage raps duct tape you battle axe butt rape you n tore off ya face like I roared off a gauge!
Then UNLEASH A GANG OF SKILL tuh REARRANGE YA GRILL like WORLD OF WARCRAFT WARHAWK GRENADES!!
Sword chop fillet yo/(beat full on kicks in) played flow yo garbage uh plummet!
You're on a WIN STREAK? I BREAK WINS//WIND like I FARTED IN PUBLIC!!
Spit a dart thru ya gullet with hard words hell bent
ACAPELLA: to put BOLTS TO YA NECK N DOME like FRANKENSTEIN IN A CHARGER'S HELMET
(Back to the beat) Bring HELLA WAR like TARTAR ZEALOTS! Got BEEF IN MIND like COW BRAIN
ACAPELLA:So tell ya boys:"CIAO MAYNE!" cuz I'm uh EATCHOO UP like CHOW MEIN!!
(Beat back in)
My VOWEL FLAME GROWL SLANG droppin speeches of unbridled rage!!
YOU'RE DROWNED IN MY FLOW like QUADRAPLEGICS IN TIDAL WAVES!
Cockin the heat n cypher blaze with bars like BARIUM sparkin him,kid!!
You'll SWEAR I'M A VALET WITH PARKINSON'S the way I WRECK HIM WHILE PARKIN HIM,KID!!
The barbs I spew are SHARKIN YOU n BAR-B-Q CARVIN THEM RIBS
MARKIN N SCARRIN YA LID like MARKSMEN DO when TARGETIN WIGS!
DethStryque is THE HARDEST THERE IS!!I'll grab the mic n BUST like I'm STARTIN TUH JIZZ!!!
At THROWIN BARS THU YA HEART I'M A WHIZ!! But YOU AIN'T ISH...LIKE A CARTON UH WIZZ!!
You FLAVALESS...I'm STARTIN TUH FIZZ!!
I'll TORNADO YA CRIB...n SEND YOU N YA M0NKEYS FLYIN like YOU STARRED IN "THE WIZ"!!
Punch thru ya chest CRUSH YA HEART IN MY FIST
When you see me? RUN! "MAKE TRACKS' like you "BARGAINED WITH SWIZZ"!!
My R WITH THE CLIPS gotcha BABY CHEST COVERED like TARPALIN BIBS!!
And your future? WATCH ME KILL IT LIKE I'M STARVIN YA KIDS!!
Beat me? STOP MARKETIN FIBS!! I'm shearin ya raps apart!
(breakin aL-b's name down)
Cuz aL-b's "a Little-bitch"! I'M "a Lyrical-battlestar"!!
I'm "a Legendary-beast" with SPITS HARDER than HOCKED PAVEMENT
Battlin me is worse than "a Life-bid" in "alcatraz's Locked-basement"!
Ock face it! You'll git wasted n ate quick like hunting cougars uh do ya!
I "articulate Lethal-ballads" hittin like "aKs Lugers-bazookas"!
(CLOSER)
I checked ya rhymes! You should admit MEN are the only GENDER CHARMIN YA
YOU BEEN IN THE CLOSET SO LONG...you found a way to ENTER NARNIA!!
Got CANNONS like ARMIES TUH plantcha like I'm FARMING YA
While ya MOMMA GIVES MY DICK BIG TOP like the HOME OF CARNIES,BRUH!!

-- Wed Dec 01, 2010 2:38 am --

Uppin for round 2

Did he just say he’d “butt rape” me?????

Deth you freakin’ fag I’ll put an end to your world of war craft, you’re PURE ASS!
And frankly I haven’t seen a worse “flip” since my kid’s “Jungle Gym Class”
You speakin’ boldly when it comes to MY ass, but Deth who you finnin-ta-rape
When half your shit in ALL CAPS is as “pointless” as dinner plates
AND WHAT THE FUK WAS ALL THAT WIZZ SHIT, really dude? Is you spassin
I stay tight I’ll piss on your gravesite How’s that for takin’ a WIZ/WHIZ/WIZZ, maggot
You came with mad hype Stryque, but bringin “Deth” to aL kid you fakin
And I ain’t seen such “nonsense on a platform” since the emergence of Bristol Palin
Dude you really shakin’, 4 days to bring that bullshit you brought to us
Just stringing lines together like you took sewing classes from Martha Stewart
So while you blowin’ farts and dicks, I’ll stick to just puffin’ and blowin trees
I got that hype shit So hot with this type script i burned holes in my home keys
As you burn holes in your old jeans from kneeling and suckin’ cock
My public fart is to “fowl” for you... so you need to be “duckin” Ock
Fukin' flop! I was flippin drops when you was streakin’ diapers. Stop da hatin’
You talkin’ bout “Cannons” well I got you in my “Sites II” like Obama’s “Operation”
Which means I’m shuttin’ dat ass down before anybody even see da man
Deth Stryque? Fuk’em he couldn’t stryque a match against a kerosene can
I’m esteemed fam, Major League Pitchin’ Get back to tossin’ boxes on yo day job
Cuz you ain’t “hittin” lethal ballads when I’m “STRYQUEing” you out like K-Rod
And as for your 30 line verse I highly doubt a voter even views it that far
So I suggest you change your font Deth and “Stryque” through a few bars
Like:
[s]You FLAVALESS...I'm STARTIN TUH FIZZ!! I'll TORNADO YA CRIB...n SEND YOU N YA M0NKEYS FLYIN like YOU STARRED IN "THE WIZ"!!
Punch thru ya chest CRUSH YA HEART IN MY FIST
When you see me? RUN! "MAKE TRACKS' like you "BARGAINED WITH SWIZZ"!!
My R WITH THE CLIPS gotcha BABY CHEST COVERED like TARPALIN BIBS!![/s]
Cause all I saw was blah blah blah, like you ain’t got the jargon for kid
Ain’t no arguing kid I’m lappin your every line like you joggin in timbs
Like how I “Stryque” a blow with your own lines Deth? Showin the bitch-dat-you-are
Cuz aL-be da drunk after the last call………. and simply finish da bar

---Switch to that quick multi type shit ---

Deth I’ll snatch ya guns leave you barefoot wit blackened gums
Smack your moms Send her the bill of health for lack of funds
You actin’ son I’ll send a Deth Stryque that’ll crack ya lung
Hijack ya drums and beat the shit outta ya bastard son
Rip your career before it launches from the onset
Stripped your concept flip the script of your whole context
Leavin’ your nonsense in bondage, kid mind your own conscious
And the next time you get on iLLest Deth, remember you owe Homage……

I'm not breaking this shit down. Overall, Death had good some lines, his best lines were universal though, so it's hard to count them. He had a few name flips, but nothing really personal. Same with aLb, he had some good lines but nothing was hitting, overall I gotta give my vote to Deth because he had more clever lines, even though they were more stretched than FL's butt cheeks.

uppin for votes

-- Fri Dec 03, 2010 6:22 am --

uppin for votes.come on yall

-- Fri Dec 03, 2010 7:05 am --

uppin

Thanks M.I.M & Ruggs, Personally I'm thinkin anyone who reads this will probably skim over round 1 and call it a day judging by the "universal" punches you guys are referring to. Doubt anyone takes the time to read both rounds.

But eh, what are you going to do about it. It's a lot to get thru.

Deth up 2-0

flow a
punches a
personals a
multis d
creativity d
enjoyment a

no disrespect i dont like it when there are explanations scattered throughout your text it appears weak and in my opinion is a form of swaying so as clever as a bar may be, interjecting to explain its relevance RUINS a flow hence my vote
similarly like telling a joke and explaining it it takes away from the punchline hence my vote
as far as personals and name play go count them a owned this category hands down in both rounds by the way this "Cuz aL-b//AL B. SURE//I'LL BE SURE" isnt name play its not at all pertinent to anything furthermore it takes away from "this WAKK GUY'S on a RAP SITE while BITIN THE NAME OF A 80'S SINGER" making it feel redundant when it could have been a very nice bar
multis were tight on both ends i gave it to d on account of vocabulary on my second read it is very close but i will stick with my initial cat vote
d was a little more creative only by a hair photo finish cat
overall enjoyment goes to a the flip round was insane in my opinion there is no contest id like to see cats from the other judges to know what they are voting on

my official vote goes to aLb
-------------------------------------------shouts to both emcees "BE EASY"

Wow, ^^^^^ a guy who actually read through the entire post. I commend you dude regardless of who you voted for, you actually got into the battle which was a damn good one once you read through it. Deth got a hell ova lot of stamina for battlin'.

Deth leads 2-1

leeroi green wrote:flow a
punches a
personals a
multis d
creativity d
enjoyment a

no disrespect i dont like it when there are explanations scattered throughout your text it appears weak and in my opinion is a form of swaying so as clever as a bar may be, interjecting to explain its relevance RUINS a flow hence my vote
similarly like telling a joke and explaining it it takes away from the punchline hence my vote
as far as personals and name play go count them a owned this category hands down in both rounds by the way this "Cuz aL-b//AL B. SURE//I'LL BE SURE" isnt name play its not at all pertinent to anything furthermore it takes away from "this WAKK GUY'S on a RAP SITE while BITIN THE NAME OF A 80'S SINGER" making it feel redundant when it could have been a very nice bar
multis were tight on both ends i gave it to d on account of vocabulary on my second read it is very close but i will stick with my initial cat vote
d was a little more creative only by a hair photo finish cat
overall enjoyment goes to a the flip round was insane in my opinion there is no contest id like to see cats from the other judges to know what they are voting on

my official vote goes to aLb
-------------------------------------------shouts to both emcees "BE EASY"

No disrespect taken,brutha Leeroi.However,you'll discover that if you look for a category by category definition of my verse and compare it to your criticisms? The DEFINITION will CONTRADICT your criticism,which is why I leave expo's.So you'd benefit from the very thing--expos--that you decry.See you said that you disliked my PUNCHES because of the EXPOs.Those are TWO DIFFERENT THINGS,and your understanding of nameplay runs contradictory to the more commonly used category that nameplay falls into,which is "wordplay/puns".

here's the definition of puns:http://www.answers.com/topic/pun

Here's the definition of wordplay:http://www.answers.com/topic/wordplay

both of these definitions confirm the manner in which I used aL-b/AL.B!/I'LL BE SURE,and in doing so flatly contradict the FACTUAL BASIS for your dislike,but have ZERO IMPACT WHATSOEVER on your PREFERENCE.You just don't PREFER expo's,and that's cool.No prob dawg.But please don't let your PREFERENCE allow you to mistakenly conclude that a bar doesn't fit the DEFINITION OF A CATEGORY.Category conformity is actually my greatest strength,and I've been doing so for years.

I agree that putting links in the middle of a verse or after a bar destroys flow,but it's also a good way to almost trick recalcitrant readers into reading the definition of something slightly obscure that most don't comprehend,and thus appreciate the power of your bar more (which is another major reason why I place the links where I place them).As I settle more in this site and the site settles more with me,heads will undeerstandand appreciate my style more and tend to peep my expos at thestart more,which will eliminate the need for scattering expos throughout the verse.

I have quite a bit of knowledge,but I read expos every time...cause i realize that i'm faaarr more ignorant than knowledgeable,and every bit of useful info is good.Our knowledge and our words are our weapons,so every expo anyone leaves has the potential of expanding my rap arsenal,feel me? The other reason that I use expo's is because--not being arrogant or stuck up here--I tend to employ metas etc. based on more rarely accessed pieces of information.Luminaries like RAKIM,CHINO XL,EMINEM,THE RZA,THE GZA, CANIBUS and maaaany others underground and in the industry decry the lack of knowledge creativity vocab etc. in most pop rap and in rap in general nowadays; I merely agree with their previously stated opinions and positions (I can leave links to these opinions if you want) and write raps that reflect my opinion in its content.Not too many guys use punches ranging from the Greek Parthenon to old skool CARNIES to weed and street stuff back to literature and pop culture from decades past.There are many who do but compared to the overwhelming masses of MCs and general hiphop heads who lack the knowledge to even APRRECIATE the artistry and technique in cats like wordplay,sound manipulation,etc? This group is small.


anywho yeah man good vote,thanks for putting it up,and whoever wins this is whoever wins this.I enjoyed the experience and look forward to more on this site.E-Z.

Okay, this shit was long, and there were lots of quotables, as well as some bars that I thought missed completely. The surprise came when Deth's set-ups seemed to be a little more on point with his verse, and thats really the only other major difference I noticed. With a battle this long, I would have liked for it to be more personal, and thus harder throughout, but I realize that its not going to happen when both cats dont really know much about each other.

I thought both emcees came correct for the most part, and I dont really have any complaints other than what I previously stated. I think this would be getting alot more attention from the site and voters if it werent so long, especially with this being two rounds. And it could have helped consolidate your punches and created harder verses. But could have, should have, would have, what the fuck ever, right?

Vote, basically for more enjoyable verses throughout, Deth.

Thanks for reading it Murk.. I know it took some time.. but it's appreciated.

Deth leads 3-1