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In the mind of the most haunted, ghosts rotted
the souls of those honors, are disposed by the host
goners, forgotten in a past written by white men
priceless, the height is beyond what the mind is
transforming fairytales, to legends, what's ur preference
intelligence, quoted in ignorance, lost by specifics
kids having kids, the mindstate of a fallen soldier
jealousy and envy, the bricks of life, haul them over
a problem boaster, only to recall the though of mold
our, society is focused on manipulation and bigotry
forgotten imagery, of what scriptures claimed, quickly
the known laws are lost, simply to save it's simplicity
what I'm finna be isn't what my friends relinquished me
distinguished dream of pedestal rockin', vista view apartment
when your let down you get so many incredible pardons
like life just walked away like a dead beat dad, funny
cuz I thought money would make him return, I'm what a drum need
a beating to make sense, replay the cymbals and play in
I said replay the symbols and play in, my soul is vacant
as society looks in and tries to imply it's a dangerous statement
I guess they forgot the role that a MC really could play
or how a MC could just go on for hours...on a REEEALLY GOOD DAY
but forget the politics, if you try to even acknowledge it
they'll say it's illuminati and remind you of it's opposite
what transcends the mind is the fact that you can't re-enter time
without a centered mind, I could tell you love is, but pleasures blind
once you trapped in that circle, you continue the route, set it's line
it's course, it's route, now it's persistance to a tempered mind
now that's all you'll ever see...and treasure right...?

Flow was great in some parts.. And in some parts the flow was really off.. But I liked your vocab usage and some of the multies you tied in.. I liked this piece tho.

This a dope drop Q. I swear when I read ur drops I never know whether I'mma like it or not, when u do a good piece its really good, but then some other piece are really 'ehh'. This'd be one of those really good ones. The message is elevated, the flow is consistent in the way I read it, the vocab brings out the precision of ur expression in a natural way. There was a time around the middle of it where i felt it started fading in quality a bit, but after a couple lines the real high quality shit reappeared and stuck through to the end. This was definetely an enjoyable and thought provoking read ...

QwarterZ wrote: kids having kids, the mindstate of a fallen soldier
jealousy and envy, the bricks of life, haul them over

Dont Know Why But Them Lines Stood Out To Me The Most.......Was A Really Good Peice I Felt The Flow Never Fell Off At All The Vocab You Used Just Seem To Fit Perfectly Overall A Really Good Drop

QwarterZ wrote:

disposed by the host
goners, forgotten in a past written by white men
priceless, the height is beyond what the mind is

kids having kids, the mindstate of a fallen soldier
jealousy and envy, the bricks of life, haul them over

but forget the politics, if you try to even acknowledge it
they'll say it's illuminati and remind you of it's opposite

Nice flow QZ.

Yeeeeeeeeaaaaaa... Another good drop bro... Nice flow Thru out.. I Dunno What Dude Was Talkin About Up There LOL... Any Ways... I Would Liek To Hear Some Audio From You... It Just Seems It Would Sound Good To A Beat... U Know An Easy Spit In A Sort Of Ways... Good Delivery On The Message And Some Aiight Word Play In There As Well... Keep At It Broski

I thought the flow was pretty good. Not perfect but pretty good. The rhyme scheme was a bit complex and I definitely liked it.It seemed like you were able to touch on a lot of topics but still made it seem like was all relevant to each other.

This was my favorite bar mostly because I felt it served to tie the content of the piece together:

I guess they forgot the role that a MC really could play
or how a MC could just go on for hours...on a REEEALLY GOOD DAY

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