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dark and bare, soul as cold as the arctic air/
Heart was snared as soon as cupid painted his target there/
But its hard to care, her emotions were fake and hollow/
Loved to taste the bottle but lust was the pill she couldn't wait to swallow/
A faceless model, body like a wingless angel/
But beauty had never came with a sting this painful/
Playful at first, she liked to be gagged and whipped/
A horny role player til the day that her dagger slipped/
The lust of a virgin, he loved when she hurt em/
Liked it rough but wasn't nuts about the blade stuck in his sternum/
As he cried with the knife deep inside his chest/
The little lioness rode him until his dying breath/
Climbed and leapt off, she laughed and swore at him/
Cuz her first kill was the first time she had an orgasm/
The porn hadn't worked, sex was ineffective/
Now dealing death was her only way to feel connected/

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-- Sat Oct 30, 2010 3:22 pm --

To be continued

Shit man, I hope this isn't about your ex-girlfriend or anything LOL.
Ill rhythm patterns here man, as u always seem to have. Internal rhyming makes it just flow so smoothly. Your words paint a pretty vivid image for the scene. If this is gonna be part of a series, seems like it could go on forever, it seems like the story of something that could be a popular tv show, maybe something on HBO just after Dexter.
Overall, good drop, glad to see u droppin in the forums again, its been too long...

shit was fresh homie. no complaints.

IntrinsicCadence wrote:Shit man, I hope this isn't about your ex-girlfriend or anything LOL.
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same shit i was thinkin' bruh. My dude getting all deep into his feelings and shit .

anyways this piece was tight to def , flow and concepts was ill .
Be easy.

Dope concept, nice delivery, every line was relevant to the story telling aspect and elevated the subject, multies and flow was on point, some ill shit.

Aha! this was def worth the read here... sick flow and multies..good metaphorical drop too.. the topic is sick as hell man.. I dont know where u think this shit up but its def great lol.. From the dagger slipped part i was trippin out... good drop brah

Ruckus wrote:To be continued

I'm waiting for it.

Flow was perfect and you told an interesting story. Nice imagery really brought it to life.

Sounds like a bad night in Vegas or a chick that just stabbed you through the heart.

Anywho, this joint was hard-hitting as usual. Everything was top notch: flow, multis, wordplay, illness.

Playful at first, she liked to be gagged and whipped/
A horny role player til the day that her dagger slipped/
The lust of a virgin, he loved when she hurt em/
Liked it rough but wasn't nuts about the blade stuck in his sternum/
^^^Disgusting...the best part of the verse.

Keep droppin, it was worth the read.