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The Dust Is In My Eyes And I Still Cant See
But My Views Been Devised, I Dont Walk Aimlessly
I Have An Urge To Push On Tho I Cant Explain
What Drives My Reason To Walk This Way

Im Old But My Visions Sharp, I Never Lost The Aim
Bold, Never Missed A Shot,& Never Boast The Claim
Death Chose To Promote My Fame, Its Perpetual Chain
Brought Those To Test The Aim, That End Their Days
Draw's A Blaze And Shot's R Flame Then Its All 2 Late
The Soul's I Take Help Break Da Chains Ta open Gates
Tho Faith In Any Way Does Not Keep My Heart In Place
Imma Slave Of Souls That Preyed On The Hearts Of Saints
Sentenced To Eternal Pain Apart In Chains On A Different Plain
They Hearts Encaged In A Vice Of Hate Thats Self Enraged
A Tool Of Evil That Eats At Me Like Lepracy Endlessly
Making My Old Heart Beat Till Im Done With Destiny
Im Marching East Tho I Know Not What Drives My Feet
I Strive To Keep The Old Shot Inside Its Sheath
But I Draw Precisely With Mastery Hit The Heart That Beats
One Move Fluidly, Faster Than The Eye Can See
The Tool Of My Might Is Thee' Staple Of A Lost Society
The Grip Is Of Ivory And A Barrel Carved With Mastery
Likes Of Which None Have Seen, Attributes Skill Of Keen
Six Bullets Made Of Dreams Seem To Supply Ammo Infinitely
My Face Is Creased From Faithless Grief
& Arthritic Knees Seem To Keep Their Marching Speed
Every Night I Sleep Faces I See Of Those Ended By Me
Mareless Dreams They Seem To Plead Their Histories
But I Cant Stop N ReLive Scenes Till I Solve This Mystery
Lived For Centuries Walking Eastely Toward Opposing Beef
I Feel Im Closing The Last Of Streets Toward Eternal Sleep
But The End Of Me Seems To Be The Farthest Thing......

- The Gunslinger

Man this was a good drop man, it had a cool consistent flow to it solid, the multies were killin it as you moved further and further in, the imagery was pretty good paintin an image in my head

A Tool Of Evil That Eats At Me Like Lepracy Endlessly
Making My Old Heart Beat Till Im Done With Destiny
Im Marching East Tho I Know Not What Drives My Feet
I Strive To Keep The Old Shot Inside Its Sheath
But I Draw Precisely With Mastery Hit The Heart That Beats
One Move Fluidly, Faster Than The Eye Can See

that shit was the part that really stuck out for this topical man so keep this shit comin looks like it's comin back slowly aiight ~1~

This is ill Flip. It seems to me that you and Mutual have really influenced each others writing, you use a kind of rhythm patterns and subtle imagery that reminds me of some of his more recent drops. I'm really feeling this drop man, seems like your written skills just keep elevating.

Yea man Mutual gives me a lil push to get my writing and rapping up. We Have To Get Some Work Out Soon Enough And Push The Envelope. Thanks For The Peep Fellas

Was this inspired by the Stephen King novel? I can see a lot of similarities. Except his handles were sandalwood, not ivory. Anywho...

A Tool Of Evil That Eats At Me Like Lepracy Endlessly
Making My Old Heart Beat Till Im Done With Destiny

Fav bar right there.

There was a tight flow to this piece and the multies were pretty good through out. The imagery was solid. This was good as a background piece for a character. I'd like to see what kinds of stories he partakes in.

i Read All 7 Books.... It Was Dope... So Yes i Did Base This Character Off Of The Tower Series... Tho I Twisted It To My Liking And Kept It General For The Most Part.. .And I Felt The Sandal Wood Would Have Been Too Close For Comfort so I Changed It To Ivory...

FlipSide wrote:i Read All 7 Books.... It Was Dope... So Yes i Did Base This Character Off Of The Tower Series... Tho I Twisted It To My Liking And Kept It General For The Most Part.. .And I Felt The Sandal Wood Would Have Been Too Close For Comfort so I Changed It To Ivory...

Ha ha, good shit.

this was a siiiiick piece my dude ur improving nicely the imagery of this piece really flowed out fluently which takes this piece to higher heights very smooth use of the multis on your part...nice concept as well really a solid piece from you...keep elevating my dude you doing your thing

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Dope. enjoyed it. Peace

"Tho Faith In Any Way Does Not Keep My Heart In Place
Imma Slave Of Souls That Preyed On The Hearts Of Saints" - favorite bar.

Nice flow my man. Liked the the topical gun slinging Rappin Duke joint.

-mountain dew keeps me pissy-

shit man this was sick..,.flow was consistent had some nice multis in there and the imagery was nice aswell had a nice picture in my head while reading it

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Im Marching East Tho I Know Not What Drives My Feet
I Strive To Keep The Old Shot Inside Its Sheath
But I Draw Precisely With Mastery Hit The Heart That Beats
One Move Fluidly, Faster Than The Eye Can See

That part stood out to me. There's not much I can offer in the way of criticism, it's full of imagery, and it's a topic that I, personally, haven't seen done well by a lot of people but you pulled it off nicely. Obviously multi's and inners are there and at this point, I would expect nothing less.

Like it, a lot, so much I might send it to Deaf Shady, see if he wants to post it on his Facebook. Good story, good flow, good use of plain font. I'm flipping out right now flipper!

The shit was uber smoothe, bruh. enjoyed the read. No complaints.