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They Knew You Were A Pathogen Portraying Ascension
Then You Send Down Your Son In Hope Of Saving Redemption
Beaten & Bullied I Was Trying To Survive What I've Taken
I Soon Realised To Give Up,Cause In Your Eyes I'm Forsaken

.....Forsaken......Hmmm....

From The Dumps I Manifested Soldiers To Repent And Enclave
Sent With The Rage Of A Million Slaves To Extents You Betrayed
Did You Really Think I'd Sit Back And Let You Gloat In Glory
You Jokes Appaul Me Watch As I Unearth This Throat Before Me
What Were Once Angels Now Flee From Light
Stedily Buidling Up Animosity To Unleash At Night
My Rage Demolishes Shadows By Revealing A Light
So I Used It To Corrupt The Eyes Screaming With Fright
A Storm Arises From Depths That Evil Couldnt Manifest
Feeble Thoughts Of My Regrets Eating In To My Success
With Titans, Demons, & People With Such Sin Filled Beliefs
Catholic Priests, Murderers, Rapists With Kin Killed In Streets
Things Spilled On Sheets Like Blood,Ink Wells & Teeth
Got Everything Ready Even The Sink Smells Of Grief
Fighting For Honour? Revenge? Or Simply Approval
Enfused With The Truth Of Your Skeptic Hidden Refusals
I Have Seen The Light But It Was Not Behind The Master
Rewind It Faster To Undo Corruptions & Decline Disaster
Since I Have Not That Ability I'll Have To Strike With Force
Ignite The Corpse Of His Son Have Him On The Ritcheous Course
Then Watch Him On A Voyage Across Sands, See Them Facing
Burning Shrubs With Wisdom Thoughts Of Three Temptations
How Could They Claim I'm A Joke, Cause I Failed To My Boss?
Let Me Capture The Ritcheous One Have Him Nailed To A Cross
I Never Had To Move Corrupting Judas Was All To Slick
His Virtue Of Compassionate Attitude Towards The Sick
Enough For Plan To Set Into Action They Saw Me Run Cold
I Just Sat Back In Glee, Waiting Until The Story Unfolds
Slower With Progression Could Never Adhere To My Pride
Is He Truly What He Claims, The Son Of My Feared & Confined
People May Have Second Thoughts So I Reared To Unwind
Possessed A Man Of Armour Put The Spear In His Side
My Redemption Feel So Clean Had To Vent With My Flames
I Saw The Chance And Took It, Too Empty His Cave
Re-Mold Myself Into What Was So Familiar,Saviour It Seems
The Ressurrection Was Unholy,I Just Played With There Dreams
Had I Really Done And Won The Battle,Can I Stand Victorious
Hands High Above My Head With Fans Applauding Us
Glorious,It Seemed Too Easy Was It Chance I Survived
Or Later Planned Something A Greater Man Had Devised

All Feed WILL Be Returned Link Or Give Name I'll Find It Thanks In Advance

Damn mutual, u can write. This is gonna be a five part poem of epic proportions. If u had the chance to collaborate with someone who can draw real well, these poems would be super ill with some illustrations accompanying them. Put it together as a small book, poem+illustrations, and with just a bit of tweaking here and there this feels to me like something publish-able.
I liked part 1 a helluva lot, but part 2 is at least as good as part 1, I don't know if I'd go so far as to say better, but maybe... Can't wait for part 3...

I'd say it was better than part 1 actually. I thought the imagery was rockin I agree with CANDICE (lol) up there about the illustration things cause the pictures I had in my head were pretty cool, especially in the 1st half.

Only part I thought 'wtf' when I read it was when u said 'even the sink smells of grief' lol it wasn't forced or anythin it just looked random as hell. Cool though ur not squeezing 3478689456 multis into ur bars anymore so it all has a more natural flow in it now. Good shit man I hope they keep getting better.

"Got Everything Ready Even The Sink Smells Of Grief"

Cause the saying as you probably know is everything excpet the kitchen sink, but yeah i agree with you i was worried about that line aswell no doubt but thanks for the feed no doubt very appreciated

I'm not saying this deserves series of the year 2010.

I'm just noting the fact..

I didnt even know there was a series of the year lol and i wasnt going for it anyway but thanks for that input Plex

From The Dumps I Manifested Soldiers To Repent And Enclave
Sent With The Rage Of A Million Slaves To Extents You Betrayed
Did You Really Think I'd Sit Back And Let You Gloat In Glory
You Jokes Appaul Me Watch As I Unearth This Throat Before Me

From the Beggining I Already See Thaat U Have In A Way Adapted The Role Of The Devil So Well That His Thoughts As You Write Them Seem Believable.

Fighting For Honour? Revenge? Or Simply Approval
Enfused With The Truth Of Your Skeptic Hidden Refusals
I Have Seen The Light But It Was Not Behind The Master
Rewind It Faster To Undo Corruptions & Decline Disaster

This right Here Makes A Def Point In The Views Of The Evil In Him. U Illustrate Here How Even God Had Flaws In His Eyes And Gives Reason To His Actions.

Slower With Progression Could Never Adhere To My Pride
Is He Truly What He Claims, The Son Of My Feared & Confined
People May Have Second Thoughts So I Reared To Unwind
Possessed A Man Of Armour Put The Spear In His Side

I Must Admit This Has To Be One Of The Sicker Parts Right Here... The Imagery That The Devil Possesed The Soldier That Speared Jesus Is Crazy...

My Redemption Feel So Clean Had To Vent With My Flames
I Saw The Chance And Took It, Too Empty His Cave
Re-Mold Myself Into What Was So Familiar,Saviour It Seems
The Ressurrection Was Unholy,I Just Played With There Dreams

Yet Another Sickly Twist To A Story Told A Billion Times... Who Woulda Thought That The Devil Took His Body..Tho It Makes Sence.. If I Was Religious At All Ud Be Testing My Faith.. LOL...Over All This Was DOPE.. Keep Dropping The Illness Bro