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New Song "Can't Stand Today" Check It Out!

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Listen, Leave Comments, Enjoy!


[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JgWpQ4LK9Mc[/video]
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Hey man, Welcome to Illest... Im Deciple, The Christian Rapper on the site...
For the track.. you got that "voice" for rap... good lyrics.. kinda would be nice to see more energy into your delivery... i wasnt to fond of the hook at all really... it was decent.. the beat was tight.. nothing impressive about this track tho... but good drop.. keep active and feed others to get more feed back...
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Thnks for listening, and the feedback, look forward to hearing your stuff, and getting used to the site.
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I'm listening as I post this. The lyrics bro, all I have to say is real nice. "I heard the greats never walk away, I bet they give there life just to live another day" thats some real shit bro. I think you should add a little more emotion towards your delivery. But for this beat, I think the emotion match's the beat. But this is nice no doubt.

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Thnx for the feed man, def. glad you enjoyed it. I'm take the emotion comment to heart and try to provide a lil more of that in my later projects. But def. keep a look out for more of my work and again thnx for listening
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Welcome to illest. Not a bad track. You have a very poetic way about your writing, which is nice, especially for a track that introduces depth such as this one. But let's go into where it needs work.

1. Quality: You either need better equipment, or better mixing. maybe both. But the quality lacks, so you need some improvement in that area.

2. Presentation: You need to have more emotion behind what you spit. Right now, it somewhat sounds like you're reading directly off the paper. You want things to be more fluid than that. A lil more practice in the booth sould help with that.

Keep at it and keep dropping. We look forward to hearing more from you.
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lol, interesting how mention voice presentation, because I've been hearing that a lot, and it probably has somthn to do with the fact that I'm reading off a paper not rhyming from memory which tends to bring more emotion from me...but ima try and clean that up and deliver a better presentation as I get better...but thnx for the feedback and def. take a listen to more of my other drops when they're put on the site
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