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I smack clouds with authority
Clear the blue skies with scorching heat
In reality
Thats just my mentality
Stompin' da ground to cause earthquakes
I surf waves
As the earth shakes
I makes
Tremendous noises
Causing commotions
That triggers volcanoes to erupt,causing explotions
Makingfireworks
Scorching
The atmosphere like explosives
Dam its so gorgeous
Furocious,lyrics
Lies in natures exhibit
Explicit
Content drops to the surface
As i spit it
Nature encourages the pain
The sleet
The rain
Just any type of weather thats derranged
Its just a cycle thats strange
As the percipitation rises and all types of weather gets in a scuffle
Thunderstorms,hurricanes and whirlwind tunnels
They all stress
To win the war and be blessed
But i jus sit back and laugh because its
"Nature At Its Best"

THANKS I'LL SEE WHAT I CAN DO

This is a solid drop as it is, but in my mind could be improved with a couple things. I like how you stay on content with the weather topic without ever really falling off, but at the same time I wished you had used these weather things, especially the disaster kinda weather, either as metaphors for something more meaningful or else had really vividly described the weather event. As it is, you drop a lot of weather words but there isn't really much imagery, and this is a topic where imagery should rule.

ok ill work on that