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This a drop takin all the feed bakk i got in all my last drops and usin all the advice i recieved..thanks guys and hope u like it.

Serotonin Emitting Flamin Arrows of Depression,
Mood Swings Released that Tear Open Aggression,
Bi-Polar? Couldnt tell u, but I'm Reacting out the Norm,
Cuz my Mood is Breaking out and Sending Acne to my Pores,
Neocortex Weighin my brain down a Phenomenal Test, 
an Obstacle Stress, caused by a Neurological Mess,
Transmitters Out of Control, Sendin Pain Down to my Soul,
Electrodes of Research Now Cloudin the Roles,
I Want the Hurt, My Mindset Could Haunt the Earth,
Yet theres no escapin,it was mere hands that Caught my Birth,
Now Lessoned Brainwaves deepen me to an Unconscious State,
Delta to Theta increasing wit Subconscious Weight,
Tremendous Pressure on my Cerebellum, It's Nauseating,Causing Fainting,Lucid Dreaming, Eyes Glossed and Fading,
Paintins of a Divine Culture,Ladders with Angels
Criss-Crossed Patterns and Angles, Battered and Mangled,
This Cant b Hell, yet Light Years from Divine,
I Dont have Much In Mind, but I Notice Some Design,
Evil at its Purest,disregarded as People act like Tourists,
a wagin war seemingly, The Steeple as the Jurist,
a Culture of Throwaways finally Know a Place,
Not one soul listening to disaster something Noah Faced, 
with an Open Glaze, I cant Comprehend the Madness,
how can a slumber cause such a Condescending Sadness?,
a Meteor Strikes at Dawn, the Medias Light is Gone,
Pedestrians Clap hesitantly Not knowin Right from rong,
They think its Over Perplex Mixed on the Faces,
Eyes Dartin like Bugs Directed from a Space Blip,
it's the Beginning Alpha Booked it's Vengeance, 
Grimly Grinning while Omega Looks to End It.....

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This piece would be easy to comprehend if you have a dictionary next to you . I understand that it is necessary to have some advanced vocab in your drops , but I feel some of the words were a little too advanced. But afterall this does show great knowlegde and your flow was better than most of the pieces you have dropped . So keep dropping bro ... pablo~

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This is a nice drop man. First off, I disagree with Pablo about the vocab thing, I think u use ur vocabulary well in this piece, too many dumbed down writtens out there and this wasn't one of em. Your flow is nice, some nice multis throughout most of it. The content is real meaningful, although it does seem to shift from an internal reflection to a reflection on the world at large. That ain't necessarily bad, just kinda gives it the feel of a stream of consciousness flow rather than a concept flow. Overall though man, this is a solid drop and one of the best I've read from you. Keep droppin..

i agree with IC the vocab was advanced and you used it nicely was nice to see.......the flow was on mark throughtout you had some nice multis in there overall man best peice iv seen from you.......nice to see you elevating keep dropping

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Good drop... Vocab heavy but hey we're all grown here... lol... I kept a flow most of the way...

Bi-Polar? Couldnt tell u, but I'm Reacting out the Norm,

Like the way that flowed...