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Ite, So Dis Is An OOOOLLLLLDDD Joint. Still One Of My All Time Fav's Tho. Just Figured I'd Post Dis Up Rite Quick And Get Sum Feedback Lol. Lyrics Below:

[Intro]
2xS, Slik, oooohhhhh, You Know We Had Ta Do It Again Rite? Yeaaahhh, Let’s Go!, shawty will you be my girl? Unh, Yeah, Yeah

[Hook]
Mami, You’re Everything I’m Wanting
Don’t Ever Think I’m Fronting
So Shawty Will You Be My Girl?
Lady, Your Smile Just Drives Me Crazy
You Mesmorize Me Daily
I Want You To Be My Girl
Misses, I’ll Treat You Like A Princess
Shower You With Kisses
But Only If You Be My Girl
So Baby, Don’t Ever Think I’m Playing
Believe Me When I’m Saying
I Need You To Be My Girl


[Verse 1- 2xS]
Ayo Baby Girl Can We Chat For A Few?
Nothin Too Big, Dats All I’m Askin Of You
Ite Cool, Here’s Tha Actual Truth
When I First Saw You? Yeah, I Gasped At The View
So Pretty, But A Crook, A Theft
And I Only Say That Cuz You Took My Breath
You Made My Heart Jump And It Shook My Chest
And I Leaned To The Right When You Took My Left
Basically, What I’m Tryinna Say
Is That I Wanna Keep It Real, I Ain’t Tryinna Play
You Smile Like An Angel, I’m Tryinna Pray
Cuz I Wanna Keep This Blessing From Flying Away
You’re Beautiful, Amazing N Sweet
Burning Desire, Blazing The Heat
The Look In Your Eyes? I’d Chase It For Weeks
I’d Do Anything If You Stay With Me Please!

[Hook]

[Verse 2- Slik (RAPPING)]
I Was Havin An Average Day
Chillin Wit My Boys J-Dub And Dre
When This Super Bad Chick Walked By My Way
Nice Eyes And Her Smile Had Me Off Inna Daze
Wanted To Holla But My Mind Went Blank
Coulda Let Her Walk Away But My Heart Said I Can’t
So I Stepped To Her, After Regaining My Composure
Opened Up, And This Is What I Told Her
(SINGING)
Excuse Me Girl, Can I Please Have A Minute Of Your Time?
Just Wanna Let You Know You’re So Fine
And I Need You On My Right Hand Side, I Ain’t Lying
Girl I Put That On My Life
You Could See My Heart Through My Eyes
Put It All Out So You Realize
Mami I’m Really Trying To Make You Mine

[Hook]

Who did the hook?
I don't really like this type of music thou
Not saying this is bad but I save the romance for the bedroom
SxS ur verse was ok, I don't think I liked Slik's
was that him singing in the second verse? if so he should stick to it

props though, just found this a mellow track Im just the hype type
but props for what it is

~Markb~

He Sung The Hook, I Just Wrote It Lol And I Like Catering My Music To Different Crowds. You Can't Just Be A One Dimensional Artist Nowadays Ya Know? As For His Verse? I Can Personally Vouch For Him Not Being A Rapper. A) He's A Singer, ANd Never Raps. So That Was His First Attempt, And B) He's From Georgia. Not Many Lyrical Dudes Comin Outta That State LOL But Good Looks For Peepin And Givin Ur Opinion! I Understand, Sum People Have Different TAstes than Others, And I Try To Find A Common Ground With Those TAstes Throughout All The Music. Anyways, Nothing I Can Really Say For This SOng. It's Like A Year Old. Bumpz!

Wasn't really feeling the chorus just cause this isn't really my music either. You had a pretty good verse lyrically for this type of song but I felt you held back on your delivery at times. You didn't finish the line out it was had to understand you. I didn't like Slik's verse at all, just that average radio garbage.