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In a minute I can spin an image vivid,
cuz I pivot to give it the rivets within it.
I'm livin' in the ripples of the spit I'm givin',
'till I reach the river's edge where the ripples end.
But before I give in, I will be the ill kid
lettin' my innocence live- in these pencil tipped gems.
My ample mind lifts- these rhymes 'till they timeless,
cuz I know time shifts, but I hold on beyond the rifts,
where the rhythm hits relevant shit not just for the hell of it.
This mellow mix of the past and the future will exist
in the gifts I'll forever give 'till I delve into the ditch.
Cuz even after death, my words are elevatin' what I did,
cuz these paintin's that I spit are more than for the rhyme's kin,
they are more than fine print, they are fortified rhymes that uplift.
See I sorta climbed cliffs, findin' all this never found ish,
'till the day I dived in, and without a doubt was astounded,
by the way I sounded, and my message climbed these mountains.
So like a fountain I began to spout with a fluid gift,
and while others quit I kept movin' to the crest,
cuz I love this shit...

Cuz even after death, my words are elevatin' what I did,
cuz these paintin's that I spit are more than for the rhyme's kin,
they are more than fine print, they are fortified rhymes that uplift

nice vibin flow, good shit

I liked how you flowed throughout this piece, especially with the internal rhymes and everything. Had a great feel to it. And how you left it open at the end, as if for someone to pick it up and keep it going was a cool way to finish the piece out. Im surprised you arent getting more feed on this. Honestly, I like the imagery and how you worked the concept from beginning to end. Keep it going. Nice drop man.

Thanks for the feed fellas, appreciate it greatly.

My ample mind lifts- these rhymes 'till they timeless,
cuz I know time shifts, but I hold on beyond the rifts,

(feelin it...line is dope).

I agree wit the utha 2 fellas the flow was real good and i liked the word play u used...solid drop man..keep ritin and stay up..one.

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appreciate the feed da.. that line u mentioned is really good isn't it, i'm gonna have to use that in a song. This drop was just a freestyle piece, but as I reread back on it it seems to have some real unique aspects to it, I might have to use this one to build somethin more...

You really used some nice metaphors and imagery to deliver a strong message on why you spit. It's something I can relate to as well. As usual your vocab is above average and the flow was on point. I can't really quote a favorite line because it's all equally impressive.

i agree with kau i cant pick any favourite lines as the whole peice was good.....i liked the flow to it the internal ryhme schemes overall really solid drop........keep dropping shot like that man

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