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New to this site but far from new to rap or text
so dont let the Rookie sig get yo ass wrecked
I'm much more like a triple sunami in affect
and when it comes to battles my boy I get more complex
I got a gentleman side but thats for the ladies
the executives with the jobs and around my babies
but I'm a beast on the set taking it like pat swazy
gets grimy like my gutters over my gravy
plus my potatoes-lettuce-and tomatoes
I'll empty yo contents split ya throat to navel
my squad move Naval, militant, nuttin can save you
the way I played you had me stamp ya with a P3 lable
call me Carl Lee on the battle field it's a time to kill
call me Bob Marley for all of the spliff I build
this freetext is off the brain-----------for real
Only smoke black hash--with the golden seal
I don't want the whole store I just a meal
enough to fill me up and flip it to a half a mill
that might not sound like a lot it's more then I got
plus I'm hot so I got-to reup on more shots
street cat-but educated to the tee It's G
Trife life it's me breakin this text for free
dig me, no pre-wriiten that aint never been my steeze
and I live my life accordingly to my degrees
yeah... Now, look at your reflection
once I'm done you won't wanna reflect again
how I step and rep wit lyrical weapons
I suggest you find a safe spot to get in
Done deal thun foreal no refreshin
I hope this FreeText comes to you as a blessin

I'll empty yo contents split ya throat to navel
my squad move Naval, militant, nuttin can save you

Good Attempt At Getting Some Complex Flow In There

call me Carl Lee on the battle field it's a time to kill
call me Bob Marley for all of the spliff I build

The Repetition On The Beggining Of Both Lines Lacks Bro... Try To Spend A Lil More Time To Make it a lil more diverse

dig me, no pre-wriiten that aint never been my steeze
and I live my life accordingly to my degrees

This Flowed Well But Left Me With only Half A Message... And I Think It Should Be According To My Degrees.... If Im Not Mistaken.. Tho It Sounds Well When U Say Accordingly.. It Takes Sense Away. Make Shure To Not Sacrifice Content For Flow

This was an aiight drop...seems u got the flowing part down and prolly got good audio capabilites.. but u need a lil development on the text side of things.. stay active here.. this is the best place to be at for that.. we have some great writers here..

-- Tue Oct 05, 2010 7:46 pm --

I'll empty yo contents split ya throat to navel
my squad move Naval, militant, nuttin can save you

Good Attempt At Getting Some Complex Flow In There

call me Carl Lee on the battle field it's a time to kill
call me Bob Marley for all of the spliff I build

The Repetition On The Beggining Of Both Lines Lacks Bro... Try To Spend A Lil More Time To Make it a lil more diverse

dig me, no pre-wriiten that aint never been my steeze
and I live my life accordingly to my degrees

This Flowed Well But Left Me With only Half A Message... And I Think It Should Be According To My Degrees.... If Im Not Mistaken.. Tho It Sounds Well When U Say Accordingly.. It Takes Sense Away. Make Shure To Not Sacrifice Content For Flow

This was an aiight drop...seems u got the flowing part down and prolly got good audio capabilites.. but u need a lil development on the text side of things.. stay active here.. this is the best place to be at for that.. we have some great writers here..

Alright Trife, this was a good first drop, especially considering it's a quick free write. I feel this drop did the job you seemed to be posting it for, to introduce yourself to the site. You got a nice flow with this one and a couple creative lines. I hope to read some more thought out shit in some of your future drops too. Free writes have their place and I think people should drop freestyled writtens in these forums more often, but if everything is only freestyled it cuts out the possibility for some real development with it. So whenever you get some more developed shit, I'mma read it for sure.

By the way, welcome to the site...