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If TRUTH IS TOLD, I'm the old man who prematurely SHOOTS HIS LOAD & always complains his SOUP IS COLD/ fridge got expired milk, cranberry JUICE & MOLD/ & when he speaks, one TOOTH'S EXPOSED & MUCUS ROLLS/ skin pale & his CLOTHES WEIRD, refusing to trim his NOSE HAIR/ thinks his house is haunted, rockin alone in his OLD CHAIR screaming " Who GOES THERE"??!!!/ eats cat food & STARVES HIS KITTENS/ BOMBARDS HIS KITCHEN with stale cookies & JARS OF LIPTON/ those BARS ARE FICTION, I'm really a PSYCHO DEMON from a TRIBAL LEGION/ know for keepin nozzles of RIFLES LEANING on your SPINAL REGION/no rhyme or reason,this sites like WWE, fake images BOUGHT & SOLD/fake beef & fake punches with SOFTENED BLOWS/now ALL EXPOSED, so I'll play the AUSTIN ROLE with a lil Ric Flair STRUT & ROBE/stun 'em all, till the CORPSES' FOLD & the Undertaker COFFIN'S CLOSED/with Crimson left standing SPORTIN' GOLD doing his best ORTON POSE!!!!!!

i liked the first half of this better, shit was kinda funny, good imagery, nice use of words and a good rhymescheme

I always enjoying writing what you write cuz of your multi use, feel reading your shit can help my own use of multis, but at the same time I feel like sometimes your whole focus is only on multis. I'd like to see a little more diversity from you, perhaps a couple writtens with a stronger focus on the content instead of just the multis. A lot of your shit I think would sound real nice as an audio, but I'd probably only listen once or twice even if your delivery was real dope just cuz you aren't really saying anything. This did have some humor though, and I did appreciate that a bit, especially in the first half.

I thought the wrestling part of your drop was the best .... also your multis are on ponit ....But yeah , like Intrinsic said , jud dont focus on multis , but tried to focus more on other things cause you have talent / .... but keep droppin .. pce

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and this dude was talkin shit about my rhmyes lol

^ yeah, crimson's very oppionated! ^

seemed like a freestyle ... i've seen much better from you. This was allmost elementary in comparison.

first half was pretty dope i thought, nice flow n multis.. i hate wrestling so i didnt like the 2nd half still had flow on lock, nice

Lol...thankz to everyone for just reading the shit...especially to thenobleone & quix....your posts were the most appreciated (ya should know why, keep descending boys)

anytime

Ive read this plenty of times just never got to drop any feed.. i think the first half was madd funny.. had me going with the old man thing.. then u switched it up... kinda like u ran out of ideas on that subject and went toward the wrestling this.. it was dope... seems like a fast key for u tho.. multies were there but i dunno.. i seen much better from u