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Just Gettin Feed On It. Using A New Mic And Still Polishing Up Mixing. I'm Sure When I Get All My Equipment By The End Of This Month Everything Will Sound MUCH Better. . .But For Now, Its A Start LOL. Could Use Constructive Feed. Thanx.

LYRICS:

HOOK
Sometimes You Gotta Face Ya Fears
Sometimes You Can’t Hold It All Back, You Have To Taste The Tears
Sometimes You Have To Force Yourself To Do What You Don’t
Sometimes You’ll Wanna Fall And Have To Prove That You Won’t
Sometimes You Just Might Have To Struggle A Bit
Sometimes You Can’t Throw In A Towel And Just Quit
Sometimes You Have To Stand And Embrace The Bold
Sometimes You Have To Go Out And Face The Cold


VERSE
He’s Scared Ta Get Up, Afraid Ta Open His Eyes
Cuz The Pains Too Deep For Him Ta Focus And Rise
He Copes And Survives On The Hope That He Dies
Because He Doesn’t Have The Strength To Even Choke On The Cries
Outside You Can Hear The Screams
The Wind Taunting Through The Window, But He Wont Sleep Because He Fears The Dreams
And The Whistles Of Demons In The Trees
The Cold Of The Winter Would Bring Em To His Knees
A Lingering Disease, The Torture Of His Mind
Poisoning His Conscience, Forging Its Design
Worsening With Time, N Creeping Through His Thoughts
So He Forces To Arise, Peeping Through The Blots
His Eyes Sharpen Up, The Images Are Clear
As He Walks To The Window, Glimpsing At His Fear
Breaks Through The Glass, And Seizes A Breath
And Let’s The Cold Winter Find Him, Freezing To Death

HOOK

flow was koo, it got better where the beat got quiet, could be that the beat was a little too loud, the hook wasn't too different from the verse so maybe workin on that so it doesn't blend in and sound like one big verse, overall this was pretty nice

Good Looks On It Bro. I See What You Sayin About The Verse N Hook Sounding Blended. Guess i Shoulda Did Sum Different STyled Vocals Lol Thanks

this id pretty dope homie.
i dig it.
nice content and flow was smooth.
maybe try doing something 2 make "sometimes" stick out more from the chorus.

You're voice sounds really familiar to me, hmmmmmmm. This was a really good track though. I absolutely loved your rhymes, and I thought your flow was great. Keep posting more stuff.

@ Abz, By Bringing Out The "Sometimes", You Mean I Should Put More Emphasis On Them? Or Do It More By Effect?

And @ Sentus, If My Voice Sounds Familiar, You Probably Heard Something From Me Under Previous Name "South Side Mexican". Thanks For Tha Love!

man your like top 3 on this site lol

I Wudn't Say That Lol, There's People Out There WAYYYY More Developed Than Me. I'm Jus On Tha Come Up

I liked the start of your verse and the lines that rhymed with design... That part of your flow was kicking nicely syllable wise... I liked the emotion and delivery for the most part as well. I do think you should make the Sometimes stick out more, but not meaning in a louder sense as much as just making it stick out, if you can feel that... Nice track tho, and I like where this is going.

Ayyy Good Looks On That Fam. I'm Kinda Gettin Wat The 2 Of Ya'll Mean About Bringing Out Sometimes. I'll Re-lace This Track When My Interface Comes In This Week. I'm Really Hopin I Make The Semi-Finals On Tha Contest. We'll Find Out Tomorrow

This is a real dope track SS. The content of the lyrics makes this song especially ill in my book. You can tell you really put a lot of emotion into the words. I'd like to hear a second verse with this, since it's kinda short, but overall this is a real nice track.

Good Looks Intrinsic. But, Lol, For Future Reference, Its "2xS" Not SS. . .Makes Me Sound Like A Nazi HAHAHAHA But Yeah. . .I Would Love To Make A 2nd Verse, But For Tha Contest I'm In, The Producer Only Made It A 1 Verse Song. And I Really Wanted To Write More Material, But His Format Kinda Crushed That Dream LOL. If U Feel It That Much, Ur Welcome To Vote For Me! I Mean, I'm Already In Tha Lead By Like 6 Or 7 Percent. . But Another Vote Doesn't Hurt. Go To http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default ... dID=787975 And Vote 2xS "Cold Winter"