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The futuristic flow(a-yo)I just burnt up the prototype
my nicca in da club poppin bottles but i can't go tonite
maybe next time I'm focused on my next rhyme
mr.incredible(yo)I feel like I'm behind schedule
take them glasses and throw em up like u balymic
my bitches be pissed cause every route i take is scenic
i see nigs and feel at home no matter where I'm at
my GPS is racist takin me ta strange places
OLD SKOOL MC old dude
I'm Back like the OPPOSITE SIDE,but thats cool
even tho i feel like i neva went away
Brett Favre shit
i neva retired my jersey i just..washed it
placed it in the closet fa lames comin fa da throne shit
i put my son on u fukks he write his own shit
gladiator flows(are u not entertained yet)
i stay fully engaged like a clutch(nicca) Corvette

man i dont know bout y'all, but i thought this was kinda whack...

I agree...keep writin man...i guess..

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Aight man, here's some help for you.

You need structure to your rhymes to being with. Make the lines that every is reading around the same length, roughly the same syllable count. This helps create a 'flow' for the reader. Once you get the hang of that, throw some imagery in and tell a story. Then come back and post that shit in this forum, and we can get more improvement going once we take that step. One,