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i liked the jason and cheat codes lines, besides that this was decent at best imo. you said pump way too much, literally this shit should be called Pump Shit lol, anyways decent use of multis, the topic was pretty solid, for a written i'd give it a 6/10, definitely a good read

shit was alright man, had a good flow. most of the punches were played as shit though. the cheat codes line was alright, prolly could have been worded better to make it more effective. it was a decent piece.

Honestly I'm tired of rappers talking about their damn bling
I'll take ya chain and choke ya to death with the damn thing
Cut ya fucking hand off and beat ya with ya bracelet
Put the pistol to ya chin and squeeze then charge ya for the face lift

The best bit to this piece bro. I see it tha same way, these rappers need to stop rappin about the thousand dollar watches, chains crib and cars, who cares about what they got. Although funny thing is before you get to dissin the rappers and their bling, you let us know that we can't see ya coz ur bezzle too bright lol.....but seriously man, very good piece ya dropped here homie, love that gangsta shit...

Snakes be slithering that's why I keep the grass cut
I stay with the pump naaa I don't got asthma

grimey way to start.

I'm bound to run the safe and take the cash
I'll leave holes in a niggas face like a Jason mask

Tough.

I know you can't see me cuz my bezzle too bright
Cheat codes wont help you my level too high

Like the second line.

When I grip the pump It'll fuckin flip a chump
No homo but, the gun'll leave ya stiffed and lumped

LOL

Me? I don't need the paper to impress ya'll
I always squeeze at haters but I aint talking 'bout a stress ball

Tough

It's a fact I hate a snitch I'll curb stomp a fake
I'll pull the pump and turn ya guts into a pasta plate

Going in..LOL

Honestly I'm tired of rappers talking about their damn bling
I'll take ya chain and choke ya to death with the damn thing

Consistent

Cut ya fucking hand off and beat ya with ya bracelet
Put the pistol to ya chin and squeeze then charge ya for the face lift

Smooth flow.

When I discharge the tech the bullets will harm and wreck
They'll zoom through ya arm and neck and demolish ya arms and vest
I keep the smith n wesson it'll more than pump and squirt
So fly ya'll can't top me you aint even pigeons just jumpin birds

I Feel like the rest of your verse outshined this part ^
I think you should of kept going with the tough shit every bar. either way this was dope, well written, grimey feel. good flow.
Keep dropping .


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this wasnt bad smooth flow on the piece, but way too "street" and that sort of 50 cent style for me, had some dope punchlines i have to be honest and it was a good read you maintained the topic well but i cant say i liked it as a whole piece simply because of what it was, good job on it though keep this shit comin, well not exactly this ya know lol

I thought it was pretty good. evo beat me to the pump thing, used it a bit much. Overall, decent gunplay verse.

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Yeah I kinda bled my mind dry with that fucking king-size drop I did, my bad lol. This was pretty nice I was feelin the cheat code/level wordplay and 'damn bling/damn thing' lines the most. Flow was as smooth as I've come to expect from u, had no problems there, good drop.

U Already Know This Was Gansta.. Gotta Keep It Simple For The Type of Smooth Style u Used Here.. Had A Couple Quotables here n There But They Were Already Pointed Out.. Nothing Too Special In The Punches Or Metas.. Jus Madd Slick Which Can Make Up For It With Delivery



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