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ok this is the verse from last year i wrote before you disappeared in thin air, i dont know if you read it and ran or if you just said fuck illest i'm pregnant, its been a year so a lot can happen shit if i know



you got me hurtin from wack text, you worse n my rap's best, facin me's an accident now this dummy's the first person for crash tests,
illy i'm certain u lack breast...face it u workin a flat chest..u couldn't find ya tits if u were searchin on mapquest

you still havn't dropped.. i guess your verse been placed behind..see your style's played out like words in ancient time, there's 2 ways i can kill you...this version's made of lines
i got a turnin state of mind to flame this jew like German hate n crime, cuz ya lyrics like HOT SEX..how i can BURN n RAPE ya rhymes!

i'm badder than BITCH knows, i'll kick your ass backwards a little, you carry plastic weapons.. that's why your essentials are daggers and pistols
i've mastered some quick jokes, "1 ill is faker than actors n rich folks", ha..i'm just 'pullin ya leg'...now this rapper's a cripple,

ya rhymes been poorly raised like kids in Mexico, seriously.. you not ill..except when bein "sick" is medical,
i'm spittin best of flows, can't deny my shit's Incredible, but you kinda like She-Hulk..your a BITCH with testicals

you swingin left n right..see ya punches need direction, ya image black n white, its a sudden weak complexion,
i'm a beast...i drop a dozen free's in seconds...swifter than bitch is ..see i irritate this pussy like a fuckin yeast infection!



n e ways.. i never drop writtens these days and this was buried in dust, for those who don't see much from me, this is me a year ago feel free to criticize as i'm my biggest critic alone


this was the 24 hour battle ill bitch never showed up to and has her first and only loss, for those that didn't know

Hey sugar plum, it was a year ago, let it go.
Boy you actin like I stood you up on a date, which is pathetic

Is this a battle call out? If so, lets make it go mojo

I'm flattered!

you did stand me up on a date, i'll wait to see how active you are before you break my heart again lol

oh my

lol, nice! I can live up to that

Awwww cute

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this dummy's the first person for crash tests,

you still havn't dropped.. i guess your verse been placed behind..see your style's played out like words in ancient time, there's 2 ways i can kill you...this version's made of lines
i got a turnin state of mind to flame this jew like German hate n crime, cuz ya lyrics like HOT SEX..how i can BURN n RAPE ya rhymes!


way 2 stretched, plus the bar is a throw away.



i'm badder than BITCH knows, i'll kick your ass backwards a little, you carry plastic weapons.. that's why your essentials are daggers and pistols
i've mastered some quick jokes, "1 ill is faker than actors n rich folks", ha..i'm just 'pullin ya leg'...now this rapper's a cripple,



Good concepts, but its just a Miss ( Though you've gotten better)


ya rhymes been poorly raised like kids in Mexico, seriously.. you not ill..except when bein "sick" is medical,
i'm spittin best of flows, can't deny my shit's Incredible, but you kinda like She-Hulk..your a BITCH with testicals


Lmao Funny bar.. I Liked the flow of it 2,



you swingin left n right..see ya punches need direction, ya image black n white, its a sudden weak complexion,
i'm a beast...i drop a dozen free's in seconds...swifter than bitch is ..see i irritate this pussy like a fuckin yeast infection!


LOL.


funny.


Anyways You had some good bars, & good concepts.. But a lot of missing took place in this battle verse, This is old shit though can't really say thats you now.

Anyways good shit keep dropping

appreciate the feedback guys, i completely forgot about this verse until she came back so reading it i thought it'd be decent enough to post up as i hardly ever drop shit now

i was actually diggin this. had some quotables and shit made me laugh. the flow was good for the most part. that mapquest line was killin it.