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Unthinkable

Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2010 10:20 pm
by Audible Thought
everybody patronizes saying i can make it in the game
but behind my back they saying im the one whos really lame
it doesnt hurt im still okay still flowin every word
spillin all this pain but truly never been heard
kickin it on the curb the liquors for nerves
i laugh when i cry, and i teach when i learn
the world keeps turnin, if you livin in dirt
thats why i grab the microphone and i spit cuz ive earned
a mother fucking voice, and nobody can take that
no matter how corrupt we are ill still have a stage pass
and get that dough, no matter how fast or slow
me against the world its a battle for my soul
been told many times that life, is what you make it
but only realized now that hard work is basic-
principle my visual is nothing short of difficult
but with this gift and focus i will achieve the unthinkable

Re: Unthinkable

Posted: Wed Sep 22, 2010 10:30 pm
by pablo1212
Cant really complain , but it was pretty simple. The flow was pretty decnt. The vocab was kinda weak at first , but it got better like near the end . Other than that , keep writin .

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Re: Unthinkable

Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 1:27 am
by FlipSide
got a lil better with the vocab toward the end...tho it seems this piece was more of a venting drop... Get that Dirt Off Ya Shoulders!
And Get Some Metas In There Man..It Helps

Re: Unthinkable

Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 1:30 am
by TheNobleOne
yeah this was nothing really special. just seemed like something you wanted to get off your chest. a little basic at times but still a pretty solid drop. keep doin ya thing man.