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when i amplify you wont i catastry that youve done but havnt made one complete with hesitent scars a cat with claws a bob cat with paws and everyone at a pause with the mouth going aww......blind and viben my talent go co neat and my strive like strisan eat ya in sands my lyrics meet man create the breath of a titan when my soul molecules myst to a fresh trident.....throw up a cop eash select the next verb...my ghosts come out the herds with herbs and try to slang to my girls contiouse on the mantle and on curbs theirs no recolection whos yours...youth is comen and why you dubben my mixtapes is a hustlen my neck broke spinnin beat breaks for tusslen i was obscure of the muzzlen talking about who was terrorist in the lounge last weak was a musslim....

LMAO!!!!!!!!!!!!

I stopped after the first sentence or line...or whatever the fuck it is
mu'fucker you made me LULZ seriously that make you go awwww lmao!!!!!!
this kid is cool in my book, you a crazy lil' mofo!!!

These Dudes Refuse to give good critque And Expect Elevation... First of all Break Ur Verse Down Into Bars So That We Know When One Line Or Idea Ends And The Other Begins...PLEASE DO THAT ASAP... Cuz i Got Lost.. Seems U One Of Them Cats Thats Spits Off The Top From The Way You Write. Make Shure U Get One Idea Out With Out Mixing It In With another. U have the concept of making it rhyme... Just work on Making The Rhyming Phrases Have Matching Syllabl;es and U Got A Multie.. Also Work On Your Metaphores.. And Some Words Were Spelled Like ur A 3rd Grade Drop Out... Might Wanna Look Into That.. Other ThaN that.. develop and put some effort into it and ull be good

yeah i definitely agree with what flipside said. organizing your bars is the first step allowing people to follow and make it for an easy read. if you have no structure then you really have nothing. so just work on tightening up your bars and keep tryin homie. holla.

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