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im new 2 dis site but heres my drop..hope yall like..leave feed and critisim i guess lol -1-


watch how this fool punches, his bars servin more shit then school lunches
beatin me?aint gonna happen,like biggie tryna do crunches
u need sum souljaz ta beat me,take ur time son and align urs
u gangsta?naw cuz only time u had 'rings' was carryin binders!
im'a take my pen and shank ya,treat u like a bad kid and spank ya
ur rhymes are horrible, u shudn't of got ROOKIE, the staf shud re rank ya!
but im down right vin-dic-tive,im'a fight'ta win-quick-kid
talkin bout u 'hard' naw, u neva dun no sin-shit-kid
im'a hitchu with tacks, so i can really 'pin-ya-wig'
call Young-J Ba-con, cuz im'a skin-this-pig!
now why u have'ta go and say sum dumb-shit?
like u 'accept' my battle,now u gonna get ya tongue-split
boi u think u the sickest lyricist?naw im'a steal-ya-place
start treatin u like oranges and just peal-ya-face


meanin behind line 6 iz his rank wuz a rookie on dis otha sitei joined not 2 long ago


justa nother verse i made...

tramatik comin wit static with an attack on ya brain
but the fact still remains i came BACK ta spit the pain
i got the talent u lack and the shit u need'ta gain
tho im shackled in chains im'a tackle the game
and hit the shit hard like crack and coccaine
on tracks im insane like a blood of a warrior
i pack it in my veins u get smacked if u complain
u 2 wack 2 entertain if we come in conctact u wll get slain
but since i started shinin thru my heart began rhymin true
sayin the truth iz what im dyin ta do so u no i aint lyin'ta u


uppin feed --1-- [marq=down]

good shit, nice ta see ya decided to JOIN US FINALLY, lol jp, welcome to the site man

Before you continue to come copy and paste. It's not recycable son it's garbage in the waste. Overall it was alright.

^everything you've posted on this site has been wacker than this so i'd drop the negativity if i were you

these pieces were alright you need a to work on your wording a lil though some of the shit sounded awkward, your rhyme schemes were pretty simple too, not bad for a first drop though

yeah it was ok. some of that second verse you used multis kinda nice, but it just had a simple feeling. You need to up your vocab.

lines like:
tramatik comin wit static with an attack on ya brain
but the fact still remains i came BACK ta spit the pain

cause of the simple words, it made it sound more elementary. Just switch it up a bit.

stay up.

thanx yo i'll keep at it...uppin

LMAO at Khilla. You're a fucking dumbass. You don't even understand my comment. I wasn't even being negative towards him. I said it was alright. What I meant was it was used before on another site. Which leads to my comment. Khilla I lost all respect for you. I actually thought you had some kind of intelligence.

do you even understand english? how are you going to insult my intelligence when you can't even spell my name right lmao

i detect a BIT of jealousy... maybe lyricist has met his match???? i think tramatik and lyricist should have a little battle. what do u all think? lyricist keep ur comments to urself. nice drop up there man.

peace

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OH and ummm if this isn't negativity, iuno what is.

"Before you continue to come copy and paste. It's not recycable son it's garbage in the waste."

quoted from Invincible Lyricist

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he aint showin beef tho he makin a comment 2 all killah but if he wanna battle i aint gon back down --1--

Shit son I don't beef on the internet over writen rhymes. He got skills no doubt about it. I wasn't trying to insult anyone. But for real though Lawgix you need to stop instigating. Of course I'm gonna battle him. Just not right now. When the time is right I'll call him out.

invincible... you, are a dumbass, straight up.

and tramatik, that comment he made was to you not all killah, then all killah contradicted and said "no this piece isnt garbage" basically, then "invincible queer-assist" had a little episode of PMS.

lol, invincible dont be such a fag, thats my best advice for you, drop something half decent before you cop an attitude... word, you drive me nuts sometimes lol

LmAo invincible queer-assist i wouldnt Take That oooooooooooooooooh Sounds Like Beef

freeflo.... best advice for u..... is shhhhhhh.... i'm not an instigator lyricist, i know a whiny bitch when i see one...