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Unemployment’s on the rise
Everyone’s hoping for a savior, eyes to the skies
But it’s like mirror, it reflects their eyes
Some understand, others give up
Return to their couch, wait for others to pick them up
Never understanding, they’re their own catalyst
They don’t put in work, hands uncaloused
Excuses, saying, “I know nothing”
That’s why they teach knowledge is power, no, king
But they don’t know it’s only themselves hurting
By not achieving, hiding behind a veil of smoke
They let their world be controlled from toke to toke
Listen to this knowledge that-I-kick-in-ya-dome
There’s more to the world-so-get-out-ya-home
Who knows you could be the next phenom.

Never understanding, they’re their own catalyst
They don’t put in work, hands uncaloused

Nice Bar...Couldve Worded it better tho

That’s why they teach knowledge is power, no, king

Dope!

Keep Attempting At The Multies Bro... Better Than The Last...Good Message..jus Work On Delivering It Better

Ok thanks man

This was cool, somewhat a simple approach
but you got some dope ideas going for you
I like the whole knowledge is king vibe you put off
reminds me of some old wise man, or something
either way you seem to know what you got to say
just need to bring it harder on your drops my dude
you got skill, you just need to expand on it, keep writing!

Qwarterz
What do you mean by expanding? Are you talking about the metaphors or what?

Safe man im new here as well, nice rhymes!

I'd just agree with the catalyst line

Never understanding, they’re their own catalyst
They don’t put in work, hands uncaloused

Maybe
" Never understanding there their own catalyst
A social reaction, its easy to be missed"

now it rhymes, nt he catalyst n reaction go together like chemistry. haha

peace

Inner State wrote:Qwarterz
What do you mean by expanding? Are you talking about the metaphors or what?

I mean don't be afraid to get deeper with it
don't be afraid to expand your vocab man
you got skill, just don't shorthand yourself man
keep writing