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from soundclick, didnt get much review lol

i left feed on 3 others i believe.

the topic was "Illuminati" /Freemasons


Since Vietnam i could tell things were wrong...
Way back in 1965 when i was honorbly discharged...
Not really pissed off, but decided to join up with Naval Intelligence...
They said id get a hefty payload if i was Able to Settle In...
Start Taking their Medicine like ephedrine Laced with a Sedative..
Oh I forgot to mention this, its a Break in the Precedent...
No Mistaken the Evidence theyre even Replacing the President...
And our Nation is faced with Erasing our Edicate...
We must bring an end to it, they cant guide the evolution of man...
Preach a green earth but keep on pollutin the land...
Theyre inducing confusion making people stupid an useless...
Back from feudal Japan, using symbols like the vantruvien Man...
It went from Greece to Rome, where they Teach the Drones...
Where greed controls us now from our Streets and Homes...
They Preach of Souls, back from Ancient Egyptian Descriptions..
Of scriptures predicting a picture for future events Writtin in Heiroglyphics...16...

It wasnt the Pharos who ruled but the Egyptian Priests...
Back then, that was A.K.A the Christian Belief...
Whatever you Witnessed or seen actually has you Bitches Decieved...
Just like you Picture a Dream, its made up, but this Isnt a Scheme...
Its the Vision of Greed, thats excelled cuz you Didnt Believe...
Like 1000s of "Christian" Freemasons who Achieved 33 Degrees...6...
They gathered in trees an crowded beneath was the Bohemian Grove...
So if seeing is believing, then i aint believing a soul...
Theyre Deciving the World, cause theyre pagans and heathans...
The Media reads what is told, they aint relaying the meaning...10
Ya Straining to see it, blaming whoever is Training the Legion...
But in reality, if you challange kings, you aint PLEDGING ALLEGIANCE!...
For Sensitive Reasons, but look back at Stanley Kubrick, a Straight Prodigy...
But do you have your Eyes Wide Shut about the Space Odyssey???...
If you have faith solemnly, do ya research but dont Pretend To..
I hope you intend to find message, untill then its To Be Continued...
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No Mistaken the Evidence theyre even Replacing the President...
And our Nation is faced with Erasing our Edicate...
We must bring an end to it, they cant guide the evolution of man...
Preach a green earth but keep on pollutin the land...
They gathered in trees an crowded beneath was the Bohemian Grove...
So if seeing is believing, then i aint believing a soul...
Theyre Deciving the World, cause theyre pagans and heathans...
The Media reads what is told, they aint relaying the meaning...10
Ya Straining to see it, blaming whoever is Training the Legion...
But in reality, if you challange kings, you aint PLEDGING ALLEGIANCE
very dope my dude,flow was onpoint,content was really good..no complaints
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Yeah Ive read this before, and its still dope to me now. The whole format and way its worded makes this flow smoothly, and your multis are on time. The description and everything is real nice. I like that first section that Abz quoted the most, just pure sickness right there. Hope to see some newer shit in the near future.
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Thanks people

But Kuhler, i had actually wrote that prolly 2 wks ago for the soundclick battle, ive done tons of topics so that might be why youre confused


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Nice topic man, I like the whole idea really
really bout the whole thing to a mold and made it work
no one has really tossed this concept around from what I see
I think I may have tried it, I don't recall really?
either way you took this and put some vivid thoughts behind it
really made it sink in, I take it you did some research?
nicely done drop my dude, keep writing, can't wait to see what you bring to the table
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Thanks Q, Yea actually i have been researching this stuff for a couple years now and it totally changed how i view everything now.

And yea, everything i wrote in it is accurate according to what i researched. And i have been researching this stuff like i said for quite a while. Definitely worth looking it to
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I appreciate the research and thoughtful reflection put into each line. You can tell you put quite a bit of time into both the research and the writing process. It's got nice rhythm, although it takes a couple lines before the rhythm settles in. Overall, it's a nice drop, one that I'm glad i read.
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This Was A Dope Topic Right Here...Good Writing My Dude... I Slept On This For Quite A While lol. I Feel Inspired
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thanks people, this is the type of insight i was looking for when i crafted this verse. And yes, i did spend many hours researching this info, i didnt just conjure it out of my head.

My main source of information is WILLIAM COOPERS "MYSTERY BABYLON" over 40+ hours of exposing everything regarding Freemasons.

Thanks for taking the time to read it.
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perfect or near perfect flow(maybe i messed up in 1 or 2 spots), i dont read lyrics i rap them lol

i love this topic and u hit on a lot of interesting things, killuminati!

damn bro, mad props

if i gotta say somethin its work on ur typos! pet peeve lol
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No Mistaken the Evidence theyre even Replacing the President...
And our Nation is faced with Erasing our Edicate

Liked that a lot ^


We must bring an end to it, they cant guide the evolution of man...
Preach a green earth but keep on pollutin the land...

Fact ^ good shit


It wasnt the Pharos who ruled but the Egyptian Priests...
Back then, that was A.K.A the Christian Belief...
Whatever you Witnessed or seen actually has you Bitches Decieved...
Just like you Picture a Dream, its made up, but this Isnt a Scheme

sooo true!! good flow, while maintaning your topic




Theyre Deciving the World, cause theyre pagans and heathans...
The Media reads what is told, they aint relaying the meaning...10
Ya Straining to see it, blaming whoever is Training the Legion...
But in reality, if you challange kings, you aint PLEDGING ALLEGIANCE!...


And yes...This was dope in all aspects. flow, content, vocab, meaning. everything.



This was a nice piece Mah dude. Looking forward to reading more of yah shit.
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word thanks quix an tree for the feedback.
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this was honestly the nicest piece i read from you... but this is also my type a drop... the first 16 had an incredible flow and read like a story i was really digging the imagery... the second part was deep and lyrical the story itself kinda got lost in that... but based on the topic it worked... there were a lot of quotables in this so i will only post my favorite part
Not really pissed off, but decided to join up with Naval Intelligence...
They said id get a hefty payload if i was Able to Settle In...
Start Taking their Medicine like ephedrine Laced with a Sedative..
Oh I forgot to mention this, its a Break in the Precedent...
No Mistaken the Evidence theyre even Replacing the President...
And our Nation is faced with Erasing our Edicate...
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wow..dude reaally nice..sik..too many quotables ...
i liked the flo and rhymescheme it went smooth...
ya kept on the topin imo..all the way thru the end..

i liked the president lines alot but the start of the second verse killed it imo..

It wasnt the Pharos who ruled but the Egyptian Priests...
Back then, that was A.K.A the Christian Belief...
Whatever you Witnessed or seen actually has you Bitches Decieved...
Just like you Picture a Dream, its made up, but this Isnt a Scheme...
^^^^^
that has realness on all kinds of levels bruh...real nice..
I enjoyed this written...No Doubt!!
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