Hip Hop Forum

Appreciate some feedback on this one. I know the intro vocals before the first verse are too low, I'll fix that up on the final version, but if you've got anything else to express, let it flow...

another laid back beat, very cool strings..
u kinda remind me of older murs
couple parts you vox need 2 be blended little better
flow is smooth matched the beat great
chorus is alitte out of tune
still very dope track man

what do ya think about getting a female singer to sing the chorus part? I've just been thinking about that possibility.

hmm something doesn't sound right to me about the acoustic guitar i dunno if its offkey or just maybe not tuned right, it doesn't sound that bad it just sounds a lil off maybe autotune or a similar plugin would help its also a bit too loud beats nice that just stuck out too me so figured i'd comment, writing and flow on this is really good deliverys on point but you seem to switch inflections with tone(may not be the right way to describe it) a bit? dunno if its intentional or not but even though its good as is i think it might sound better with a bit less of that, i like the lyrics of the hook and see what you were going for but you didn't pull it off well at all this would definitely sound better with female vocals over it

track has the potential to be crazy just mainly needs the hook re-done by a singer so it sounds as polished as the rest of the track

IntrinsicCadence wrote:what do ya think about getting a female singer to sing the chorus part? I've just been thinking about that possibility.

No doubt.

Lyrically I thought this track was decent.

I don't know if I exactly agree with the message of it. I'm a big fan of soft rock, that's what this came off to me as, not even so much hip hop or more a mix of the two genres.

The ambience of the song was cool though.

Uppin.. Hopin' to get some more feedback on this one. It's quite likely to make the cut and be on the CD I'm putting together, so I'd like to hear what ya'll think...

this was quite good imo good quality on the recording, the singing was alright in all honesty, the lyrics were pretty elevated on this piece you didnt slack on it, well done with this track many, as they said maybe re record and some mixing touch ups which i may be able to help you with could be a dope track, keep this shit comin man

wasn't feelin the rhymescheme much, lyrically though it was alright, i was expecting more for some reason, beat was chill, liked it for the most part, definitely a choppy flow imo. felt rocky n out of place in some areas, everything else was koo though

Dude i love your flow man... how u rode the beat was sick.. all low but like u said u will fix that up... lyrics are tight.. i didnt like the hook at all.. a female would sound nice on it. these type of beats you can really do damage... way laid back.. you did very well at this...

yes a female would do justice to the hook, i'd like to hear this remade by u again with a few improvements to the lyrics rhyme-wise and flow-wise, a beat like this deserves some lovin